Paul_B_4143

Thanks. Ver grippingy

I soon did,

I like how you keep tension

Nice progession. Just make sure the reader can form a consistent picture, with what has been described.

Gripping

„tongue“

I like the description but the „figure“ may need more description. I know I have done this when I have written, because of what I have had in my minds-eye I have failed transfer to the text. If then say freakish features then the reader is unable to grasp what is freakish.