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As of reading to chapter 133: It’s good but definitely has flaws. The first one is that it feels like the story is forcefully staying away from ‘adult’ stuff like how Rin is making money. It feels like it’s just a lazy way of saying “oh yeah she has money now” without having to add much to it. The second flaw is a little more personal but I don’t really like the whole Xhez and June thing that’s happening and it feels forced. The whole thing about Xhez wanting to do ‘stuff’ makes a lot of sense however it’s mostly ignored unless June is talked about when(personally) I think it would make a lot more sense for her to do that ‘stuff’ with Rin first and not some random person she met once. Overall I give this story a 7.5/10 right now.
I’m sorry author but the last chapter made me need to ask…who does Xhez end up with(if anyone at all)?
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Why you got to make this stuff weird with your word choice
Ah ok that makes sense, thanks.
Wait…didn’t they have a conversation about Renna being mostly exclusive..? Because that’s what I got from those chapters a while ago and since then she done “stuff” with three different people, two of which have no real connection to her. Do let me know if I miss understood though.
+ I honestly think this would of gone better if you just thrusted her into the family like pretty much every other character(no hate) and not spend so many chapters making it something unique and special. While those chapters were really nice and everything, it just doesn’t work in the long run with this type of stuff in my opinion.
Yeah I can take a lot but for some reason the last couple chapters weren’t it tbh…found myself skimming through them since I just wasn’t enjoying reading them. That’s kinda crazy since I’ve read like 1,000 chapters across your stories and that’s the first time I’ve skimmed through any chapter(s). Hope the rest of the story is just as good as the rest of the story though :)
So author…I feel like I’ve learned a lot about what you are into but I can’t really say much since I’m this far into the story lol