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Taki_01

Taki_01

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2022-11-16 JoinedGlobal
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  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Taki_01

    I haven't gone too far but a good way would be to introduce a character/survivor from the race, Naphilar to narrate the event. I don't know about how their race works and how long they live but if there is one that possibly witnessed the whole thing and is still alive, it would be a good way to narrate the story from his POV. If it's not possible, there could also be records or documents from history that could be found somewhere.

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  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Commented

    their thirst for blood* possible mistake

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  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Commented

    I love the prologue. It's really nice how there is so much potential for the story to kick off from just this chapter. I hope we can get some of the lore in detail and if we don't, that's fine. I just want to see how well it all plays out.

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  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Liam_Hunt_0618

    Alright then. I'll give it a try but I'm busy during the week so it might be a slow read

  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Liam_Hunt_0618

    I have other things I want to write about like slice of life one shots. The one I currently have in mind is something I've always wanted to do irl but I can't bring myself to so I'll just make a story out of it. I read most times but manga. My fav genres are action, adventure and... mystery.

  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Liam_Hunt_0618

    Thank you for the well detailed review. I'll work extra hard to keep the quality of the second part as great and consistent as possible.

  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Liam_Hunt_0618

    ok. Can you rate this part /10?

  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Liam_Hunt_0618

    this error has been corrected btw thank you

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  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
    Replied to Liam_Hunt_0618

    Time to ourselves as in time for them to talk without the lady present. Just time for the boys to chill and talk.

  • Taki_01
    Taki_012 years ago
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    My mistake. Thank you for spotting it. From the narration of events there, you'd see they only headed there to look implying it was already open. The mistake was in my dialogue. Aaron was supposed to say look in the drawer and not open.

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