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I never wrote it was compulsory for you to write it that way. If you read from the beginning carefully I wrote the word 'suggestions' so what you could do was either read the suggestion and if it doesn't align with the way you want just ignore or don't read at all. Also, suggestion is part of a feedback. When given a feedback don't use aggressive text to reply. you either ignore the reply or tell the person thank you but don't was how you want the story to go and don't use words like no one can tell me what to write.
it's been good so far. I would suggest that you reduce is pride and not be has prideful as iron man in marvel. He shouldn't be someone who likes to show off like he did in chapter 3. He should be focused on technology and please do not direct him to magic and if you do let it be technologically. Also, make him have legion of iron man where he will be one man army. Also for his secretary don't choose from any villain or heroine just an ordinary person not known. He should be chasing after girls. His lifestyle should be getting more knowledge, representing justice, Inventing tech stuff. Please no superpower. That all I could think of.
none. he should be single through out and less emotional especially it's desires. so that it's won't destroy the story in future
even a fool will know that you were related. he has be shouting Raven along the way and the way he behaved was different from what he used to be.and I won't lie I starting to get bored of this because this involving love stuff. he's Former self could think straight know what to do but now love is starting to cloud his intelligence and giving him a weak point and a trigger that would hurt him
my nickname sake “Golden Prince" that's so cool