Ignisar

I saw your post on Reddit and read your first chapter. I’ll be honest, I won’t continue reading because it’s just not my genre, so I won’t give a star rating. However, here’s a neutral assessment: Descriptions: You always just say what he does, but it’s better to show it. Instead of just saying that he urgently needs to go to the bathroom, you could show him getting restless, like crossing his legs repeatedly. You could also describe his surroundings a bit better. Emotions: They are practically non-existent. You constantly use the word "was." It’s normal to use it often, but try to actively replace it with other verbs in past tense when possible. One more note (not neutral): It seems intentional, but the MC is quite an unpleasant person. I didn’t like him right away, but I’m sure there are readers who will feel differently. Good luck with your writing. One more tip: read a lot. Your text feels very monotonous.

So then, let's begin with my own EXTREMELY OBJECTIVE analysis. Objectively speaking, my book is, of course, the best. No one will ever write a better one. Clear as day. Jokes aside, here's my assessment: Characters: Not bad, but far from good enough. The emotions are somewhat lacking, and a unique way of speaking would improve them. On the positive side, they have their own personalities and don’t just revolve around the MC. Worldbuilding: I’m proud of this. It becomes clearer as the story progresses—maybe in Volume 2 or 3. But I’ve put an incredible amount of effort into it. Story: It’s not bad, but it could have been developed a bit more. Overall, I think I’ve done a good job, but not a great one. There’s still a lot of room for improvement. By the way, it’s a rather slow-paced novel. If you have any questions, feel free to reach out to me!

Yes it was a good one

Thanks for the hard work from Kinugasa

A little bit like Kushida .

But i dont think this Fight will be in this semester

It will be defenetly good , the best Fight will be the Fight kiotaka vs koenji

When will the next chapter comes

Okay thanks for the answer

Have anyone an idea when the next chapter is comming out ?