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What? How did get access to nen. That's huge thing to just gloss over.
Why are you shifting point of view all the time, It doesn’t make for a good story. Sometimes it makes sense but you shift POVs at random and it takes you out of the story. Keep to one POV som one can get to know the main character. The premise of the story was the thing that drew me to this story. But since you hope around the characters like pinball I am out. Good luck with your writing.
I am sorry but jumping form pov to pov of different characters before you even laid the foundation for your main character. That just makes me not want to read more. Cool concept but it need work.