Finarel

Writting a story is very hard. I am trying to write my own, so I understand the fact that it is not easy at all. So I admire the work that you have done so far. That said, I want to tell you what I liked about the story, I want to tell you what gripped me at the start: I was very interested in the dungeon, in his class, in his growth, in how he would evolve the snakes and how that would affect the rest of the world. I feel that the way the story is going forward is taking away from the strength of your story.

I tried to like this novel. I really did. I could not even reach chapter 10 before I got tired of it. It’s not that it’s bad. The writing is not bad. It’s just boring. After 9 chapter nothing interesting happened. He was too happy. Too perfect. Too boring.

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

Too easy? It has taken almost 300 chapters to get him to grow! Lol

So, friends can’t send messages to each other in this game?

Chapters are too short. I like the story tho

Things that I like about this work: World building- the author created a work which makes sense and which makes me want to know more about it. MC- usually the main character goes from power to power growing and generally becoming more or less of a god. It is often easy for the reader to know how things will turn out, which makes the reading experience boring. The author has kept some of those characteristics, while at the same time adding a moral tension. Having power not only does not solve all problems, it often creates new ones which can not be solved simply by getting a new power up. I have read 170 chapters so far, and I hope that this work continues for a long time. I am looking forward to reading how everything will be resolved.