Bruh the story was actually good. It was all perfect Just some grammatical mistakes where there like in a para, you wrote to shift two times. And in a mid of the para, the name of alex is mentioned as Alice. Nothing more. The story is moving flashily and seems to be pretty interesting. It has a good flow and an easy and understandable language. I guess you have kept some of your habits here🌚, but yeah it's cool. Keep it up bro.