thank you

yes, I wanted to make it simple and easily understand... so that readers easily figure out whose thoughts and comments it came from. is it ok? or should I change it? I am open for suggestion

It has a great plot. Kudos to you for being able to pull off using intricate words.

the way you build the world of your story was really good. When I am reading a certain story I tend to visualize the authors description. You have written it in a manner that I can imagine the world your trying to build up. I can also feel the pain and anger of your lead. Nice work

The flow of thought needs fixing...but overall I like the plot. it is quite an interesting story line.

Thank you for your insights. My heart swells with pride knowing someone understood my novel.... Thank you for inspiring words. I will try to draft a better story line. your words gave me a boost as a writer. Have a pleasant day.