WritingforXP

I read the first 6 chapters (all that's available at the moment) in one sitting. Not a dull moment. So it's fast paced and action-packed. The author's narration is impressive. And I'm curious as to whether English is just a second language to him. Ayaan's character has his motivations well-stated. I know why he puts up with the hellish training, so that's great. My only complaint is that I don't know him well enough as a person yet. Who is he, really? He seems to know little of the world considering he grew up in the slums. I imagine someone like that would be a lot less polite. And maybe even curse a lot more. The side characters feel real enough. The dialogue really sets the tone. It's India. Though it'd have been great to explore the coach's character a lot more. I feel he's got quite the backstory. I recommend reading this if you're looking to take a break from LitRPG or Progression-type novels found here. Think Hajime no Ippo. A hard worker's tale.

Idea: A rival his age to spur the fight in him.

Oh, I love a good backstory... He sees someone in Ayaan... Another student, from years past, gone rogue perhaps? 👀

Good. There are no freebies in life. I'm glad the old man's not some Samaritan.

Man, he's observant... Good question.

Ayaan's a hard worker. You can't hate a guy like that. 💯

Great set up there. But I feel we could have had a bit more exposition. How bad was Ayaan's life on the streets? Did he make any friends, enemies? What were his fears? knowing some of that would make me want to root for him more. Not that I don't already.

"... and if you're going to try, go all the way." — CHARLES BUKOWSKI

Ayaan's glow up will be quite the read... ✨

How did Ayaan learn to read? 😅