Whoa, that was neat! A beginning to a story that is bound to satisfy or mystify people of all ages, genders and dimensions. If it doesn't, then you're possibly in the wrong timeline, friend. 😂

Wholly amazed, thy skills be praised! Thou art thine greatest storyteller, thus thee shalt reign over the commoners supreme! Bless and blessings be upon you!

Needs more work on designing characters properly. Half of them described so far seem like edgy anime side characters. The world seems overcomplicated. Good luck trying to impress more than a 100 people with this. It's good, but not good enough.