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so that was your alt account or not? cause if it is, it's rather sad for you to review your own novel using your alt account. now now, you said it yourself, your account name, the cover picture, your profile picture, all ciri. if your novel is not biased to her, then I don't know what is. and seriously, you just kept going, I reviewed it because I want it, and now you're salty, you said that reviews should be subjective, and I said my opinion, but now you're mad because I'm being subjective?
oh wow so that was your alt account. anyway, in my opinion, stories like this(built around the female lead and built around author's crush of the character) won't last long, and the quality will drop quickly by the time the MC peaked at their relationship with the fl, because the author tends to get bored at that time, as the 'scenarios' they've built in their mind have all been written. I hope that's not the case for you though. well, maybe you've thought of a lot of scenarios(I can tell, the profile picture, the name, etc), and it would make the story much longer and better. that's it for me then ;)
you the author's alt account or something? I said that because at that point it's a bit annoying how the author have a clear bias towards ciri, how he clearly have a crush on the fictional character, how clear the reason he wrote this story IS because of ciri. and for a guy who strongly recomends that authors shouldn't do romance, you seem awfully bent on defending it, but i guess I do see that the romance is kinda good, compared to other story in this site at least.
do you even know how to write reviews? there are several categories of stars, i simply rated them based on my opinion, or do you also feel a sense of entitlement with my train of thoughts? reviews are opinions, based on how readers like it and don't like, while ratings are a quantifier based on the site spesification , i put 5 stars in writing quality because the grammar and wording are perfect, but I also put 3 stars in story quality and character development because the story bores me and I see no significant trait of the mc has that appeals to me. is it that hard to understand?
so? "may" means it has the possibility of it being the case, otherwise it won't be mentioned at all, but op outright denied it altogether saying that it's just "a thin sword with an edgy name".
i know it's wish fullfilment, but it's getting too smooth for the mc, no concequences at all, even the faith didn't bow down to Maegor the cruel for a long time before the high septon died, and even then the faith militant still rages on until jaehaerys reign. i see readers said that mc is hand holding the targaryens too much, i say he's destroying what aegon and jaehaerys built slowly with his selfishness and pride. tldr, i feel like it's getting boring.
the good, the bad, the meh. the good: 1. it's really well written, by that i mean the words are a bit "poetic" like a normal piece of fictional novel, unlike most of the stories here, whichis quite nice. 2. the "progression" of the plot is natural, like there's a reason ciri is there, notjust because she's there because the autbor wants mc to f her. the meh: 1. the author's a siimp, not the mc(at least not yet), but the author. if you read it, you can tell his bias against ciri. 2. now i might be a bit biassed here, but i hate when author does 3rd pov, yet they saw a character's thoughts on the dialog format instead of good ol exposition. i mean if you want to do that, justuse a 1st pov, or switch between scenes. the bad: 1. i don't know if it's just me, but the story... just don't really hook me, maybe I was thrown off by that prologue, but who knows. 2. in the prologue, the mc suddenly thought of something that feels like the author just ripped it from the wiki, andpaste it to become mc's thoughts, it just threw me off a little, likeat least make it like he's talking to himself, not thinking about it to tell the reader about the lore. --- there's one more about the author suddenly name dropping ciri without her introducing herself, but I don't know where to out put it tbh. overall, an average to decent story, should read it to see if it fits your taste.
oh wow, i wanna say simp, but i am one myself
you suddenly name drop her... i mean i know it's ciri from before, but come on, at least let herself introduced her self first before the narator(you, the author) say her name, i'm starting to see a pattern here...
seriously? why?
no seriously, I can't understand this. if it's fanart, I could understand, but if it's books, like OP said, it's just a bunch of words bruh, no description of her shape of face at all as far as I'm concerned. how can you compare this: "Princess Rhaenyra, the little girl the court singers dubbed “the Realm’s Delight.” Though only six when her father came to the Iron Throne, Rhaenyra Targaryen was a precocious child, bright and bold and beautiful as only one of dragon’s blood can be beautiful" To this:
oh usually i'm not this early, but let's review this. as usual, the good, the bad, the meh. the good: 1. the grammar is quite good, at least, compared to the rest of the novels in this app. 2. it's dance of the dragons fanfic, though if we see MC's circumstances, i imagine that it'll be quite different. 3. the author did his research on the world, and tries to make the character as accurate as possible, though there's some off things here and there that we'll talk about below. 4. The MC isn't that OP, he just some enhancements on his senses, and the author teased that he can do a bit of runic magic as well. i just hope that the mc will have obstacles instead of everything going too well for him like that other HotD fanfic last week... the meh: 1. i don't quite like the start. How Daemon could somehow "get along" with Rhea is a bit off for me, though I guess that's the whole point. 2. i don't really like the 1st POV style to be honest, I like it more when the author writes on 3rd POV, but I guess the 1st pov has its charm. bad: 1. to be honest, i don't really have a huge complain, although there's one that bothers me the most. the MC said that he wants to have freedom, but I don't see what kind of freedom does he want. does he wants to do whatever he wants? or simply that no one bothers him? idk author doesn't explain it very wel, but it's quite early, maybe he'll explain it later. overall, a really good fanfic to be honest, for me anyways, it's a good start
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haven't read the fic, but helaena seems like a good choice, not alicent, besides, KEEP THE BLOOD PUREEEEEE