Argent_ASNC

The idea for a story is cool. but each chapter repeats the previous ones... Author, are you kidding me? After Gojou disappears, Yuji appears out of nowhere for no apparent reason. It feels like several chapters have been skipped between chapters. And the main character, Ayame, constantly says "no." She made a rather dramatic appearance in the first few chapters, but then somehow vanished, constantly repeating "no." It's such a mess that I lose the desire to read.

Honestly, it's annoying. Everyone can see right away that he's old and sees too much. Normal kids like to look at everything, too. Author, are you 15? What kind of eighth-grader syndrome is this? Your writing style is incredibly annoying! Everything was fine at first. His mother looks like "Mother Teresa"—what kind of idiot is she? How did she even get to Voldemort and settle down in bed while Bellatrix runs around him day and night? Elaine is an unusual creature, capable of getting so close to Voldemort. Maybe she enjoys the danger? Look how she cares for the elf. She might help all the poor and needy, or maybe she just enjoys helping, feeling needed. In short, your characters are somewhat underdeveloped. And the fact that Aurelius saw some scarecrow and immediately believed it, so much so that he even started hugging it... God, I'm so sorry, reading all this is driving me crazy.

It's very strange to watch such a conversation. The conversation between them is too strange for the Marvel universe.

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It's incredibly annoying. And he's a former businessman... A complete failure.

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The main character doesn't look anything like a pirate with a white beard. He's too naive and trusting. Although this is just the beginning, we don't see him choosing children for his family. The fact that he befriends the characters and becomes their brother is a completely different matter. He should have known that his knowledge of the future would eventually be revealed. There was no point in telling his parents he'd known the future all along. He was simply giving himself a suspended sentence. Too naive...

The hero is too young for these adventures, he is not the right age, he is too young. As far as I know, the Sharingan can't be different unless the eyes were transplanted. He hid from experienced shinobi too easily and attacked Tobi, and he was still a child; he couldn't have done that.

Your protagonist doesn't want to know what a "dōjutsu master" is? He just decided to spend a month thinking about something he doesn't know... wow! I've never encountered such stupidity... He doesn't think about anything at all. If he's this "stupid" at the beginning of the chapters, then it's not worth reading at all.