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XGRIMMHEARTX3dCommentedIsnât it a truck?
"I must admit, waking up to find a new van at my door surprised me. Thanks, by the way. And yes, I'm partly here to thank you. Convincing my father to accept it was tough, but I think the color helped."- XGRIMMHEARTX8dReplied to Razish
Right? It was right on point
The employee's forced smile turned into a stifled chuckle. "Buzz Lightyear? Good luck with that, buddy. We've been sold out for days." - XGRIMMHEARTX9dReplied to Exi_Nexi
Honesty my post was over 5 months ago. I donât remember his fic that much and Iâm not gonna re-read it đ
Yuri quickly caught up with Tom. He waved the bouquet of flowers in his hand excitedly. "Who are you really? Is this magic?" - XGRIMMHEARTX15dCommentedCh 12 Betrayal
- XGRIMMHEARTX30dReplied to Iamsleepyasf
Thatâs because everyone was like 5â5â
That was the first word that came to mind as she laid eyes on the newcomer for the first time. And he was tall. Rias herself stood at a reasonable height of 5'8" but the man in front of her had to be at least 6'1". - XGRIMMHEARTX1mthReplied to SavageKirin
I donât think so. Itâs a curse built into him for balance or so Iâm assuming. His evolution should never surpass that of the entity that gave it to him. The only way to skip the curse would be to destroy all the branches of the tree and the tree itself, but then there would be no way for him to die which is a curse itself.
"A PIECE OF WOOD FROM THE YAGGDRASIL TREE OF LIFE AND DEATH AS THAT WILL BE THE MOST REASONABLE WEAPON TO BE ABLE TO KILL YOU AND THE NEMETON WOULD IS A BRANCH OF THE YAGGDRASIL TREE SO IT MIGHT BE ABLE TO PUT YOU TO SLEEP LIKE THE DAGGERS FROM THE ORIGINALS, SO THAT'S THAT, GOODBYE AND NEVER TO SEE YOU NO MORE" - XGRIMMHEARTX1mthReplied to ThatWeebWriter
No problem!! Youâre doing great other then that!!
"They're both in terrible conditions but I'll be damned if I can't save them I'll insert Avalon into the other boy and I'll give the rest of my crest to jump start the other's slow beating heart," the man muttered under his breath and the next thing I saw was a bright golden flash along with a vague image of someone dressed in armor with blond hair the rest of their features I could not see due to them not facing me and then blissful darkness. - XGRIMMHEARTX1mthCommented
I like your story, I just think you need to learn to use periods to separate your sentences. That way itâs not a cluster F**k and is more manageable to read.
"They're both in terrible conditions but I'll be damned if I can't save them I'll insert Avalon into the other boy and I'll give the rest of my crest to jump start the other's slow beating heart," the man muttered under his breath and the next thing I saw was a bright golden flash along with a vague image of someone dressed in armor with blond hair the rest of their features I could not see due to them not facing me and then blissful darkness. - XGRIMMHEARTX1mthCommented
Is it $500 or $500,000
"It's interesting that you say that. There is even a money-back guarantee on the site, and since it seems interesting, I bought that pill not only 2 minutes ago. It was only 500.000 dollars anyway. Weird that he wants Dollars, but who cares." Nezu said to the surprise of anyone else in the room. - XGRIMMHEARTX1mthCommented
What about Caroline? Does that mean she doesnât exist anymore?
He could have just kill Jonathan after removing the Gilbert's ring but then, Elena would not be born in the Gilbert's family and it will be a pain to find her around the world until he gets to her. - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthCommented
I would have re-named her to Sammy since she shares DNA with both.
"You have the shortest attention span everâŠalright I guess this is just another thing I have to train." Danny gained a look of conviction. - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthCommented
Pokemon is plural (meaning you can just say Pokemon not PokĂ©monâs). Example: I will be the best trainer this world has ever seen! Iâll accomplish it by catching every Pokemon the world has to offer!
"The rules are a knockout match using two pokemons and a gym leader cannot change Pokemons only a challenger may change his Pokemon" - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthCommented
I hope rizz builds a red eyes deck
Joey looked at Ryze with a suprise face and Both of them smiled at each other. - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthCommented
The grammar is so bad đ
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+11111
This book has been deleted. - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthReplied to GuyTB
He couldnât find the button đ
Half an hour passed, and with Chansey helping me out, it didn't take long at all to get my tent set up. Mostly because, unlike the tents I'm actually used to, the one I got freaking inflated out as soon as I pressed a button on it. The technology of this world is fucking insane man. Something like this would cost easily over a grand back home, but here it was the price of any other tent. - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthCommented
I think you mean shots⊠as in multiple đ
"Why? Too afraid to get rabies." I smirked and immediately scowled as the image of me having rabies flashed into my head. "And speaking of which, I'm gonna stop by the vet clinic after school, be sure to get me a shot." - XGRIMMHEARTX2mthPosted
I want to be kind, yet the writing is very robotic, and that constantly draws me out of the story. The word placement and punctuation should be fixed. I believe that will make the story smoother, also describe things more, and have some fun with it. (Never start a sentence with but btw) Good luck author and cheers to improvement!
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