Victor_7740

U don’t have to dedicate entire paragraphs explaing the obvious just to stretch word counts. It gets real old quick

Just a but of criticism, this entire para is quite redundant

Meh pretty tame for devils

This is very Aladeen news

Regardless, the dude is a kage, a veteran of 3 shinobies war with a body count higher than 90% of the shinobies in the world. Asking a child to escape him is folly

Good, i hate most oc fic where rhe oc has no effects on canon. Having an effects mean the oc is now strong enough to change the future

Some nature manipulation and proper engineering should do the work.

Ye lightning beats earth just like how chidori pierced gaara defense

Huh? Pretty sure third raikage died from facing 10k iwa nins solo

Maybe they are not as famous, especially Jiraiya since before Hanzo, and of the Sanin, Tsunade (because of her lineage) and Orochimaru (because he is a young prodigy) took most of attention away from Jiraiya even tho they are all the student of the third hokage.