Abhiz_Maha_3129

Pair? Duo?

Aurora. Spelling needs correction.

Im liking it.

+2

Is he gonna gen lock gwen’s dna?

Rather than: in a sympathetic voice, say: said sympatheticly.

I dont think you are wrong in terms of the grammer. Tbh not really my forte. It’s been a while since i read this, but going based off your explination; “At your commmand”. Wouldn’t that mean he is waiting for a response from the boss? “At your command” At= future/ not yet happening As= Already happened or is happening. Its not as if he was asked by the boss if he would do this or that right? Or am i remmbering wrongly? It wasn’t a request but an order right? So it wouldn’t be a matter of respect or willingness.

Also Daichi means earth. So Earth Nine-spiral

I would like to suggest: DAICHI as in DAI meaning great and ICHI as in one. Great one! Also for the last name some thing like Kyuzumaki. Which according to goolge means; nine picture spiral. Daichi Kyuzumaki!

Has potential, looking forward to seeing this completed