nice, looking forward to it

yes but if its as long as he desires then couldnt he have it just active for forever and never have the cooldown?

yes because it doesnt make any sense that these animals are anywhere near hungry when the swamp apparently has food in abundance. how could anything be hungry with "limitless eels" in the water

i mean to be fair one of them is completely covered in rotting human skin

please keep writing. The story seems promising and the writing quality is also very good (didnt notice any mistakes at all) and you also seem to pay attention to avoid repitition (some novels start every sentence the same way The, The, The, . . . but you avoided that even though the character doesnt even have a name at the moment) [img=recommend]

Finally it continues

many skeletons not money skeletons

Aurora Borealis? At this time of year, at this time of day, in this part of the country localised entirely inside your dungeon?

i think theres a mixup or something this chapter is the 2. half of chapter 2 instead of a new chapter 3

This review is after chapter 1 so everything that is still an unknown (lile story development, character design, update stability. . .)is rated with 3 stars. This is more for the author as feedback and recommendations instead of future readers. The writing quality is top. I wasnt able to notice a single mistage so if there where any mistakes at all (and i doubt that) then they are so minute that they dont realy matter (for me at least) since they dont disturb the flow of reading so without a doubt 5 stars for that. Ok now recommandations for possible (hopefully) future chapters. I hope the "system" part is going to be more of a side thing where only major things are written down and that its brought up not to often like other stories where at chapter 12 you have to scroll over 5 pages to go past stats and skills like "eating lvl 23" or "butt-clenching lvl 13" and or that its used as a cheap way for character growth where the MC doesnt realy do anything and suddenly knows more then a master wizard because "skills". Its usually more rewarding if in my opinion the MC has to realy dedicate themself instead of getting it handed on a silver platter. Whats also important is that he doesnt become a naive idiot or just an arrogant asshole (because muh strength) And last but not least avoiding powercreep and at the same time not just making the MC stronger and all enemies as well (if the MC is twice as strong bit so are all or most enemies nothing realy changed) What is already great to see is that the MC seems balanced. Hes competend but not a one god army (gets shot by a soldier he didnt see) he is seemingly caring but not to the point where it doesnt make sense (he looks after his comeades but doesnt decide to go to a world he doesnt know just to save people he doesnt know) and its great to see that its hinted that he has his own will and tries to make his own future by choosing the 3rd option that hints to more of an open world for the MC instead of being a glorified delivery guy that just gets sent wherever by gods. Sorry if this review/feedback seems presumptuous its just that there are so many stories that start great or good and then at chapter 100 you ask yourself "why am i even reading this". This isnt meant in any way to discourage, the foundation looks great, im looking forwards to further chapters and good luck and have fun.

right? and then he is described as "paranoid" despite him being an idiot when he wants to go back to his home when he knows hes wanted in the entire town and country, doesnt clean up the place where his skeletons fight hundreds of beasts so everyone can find the corpses and seemingly thinks only a monster can be after him not even a week after this worlds version of the NKVD makes him the number one target

ERA is a type of armour that is used since the cold war so its not that uncommon to know if you are interested in military tec

this is great. if this was poorly written he would just accept straight away so good job on that. also like the way how its done from the beginning with the "restrictions" that make sense like no vocal cords and so on. he could also reinforce his bones with cloth drenched in tree sap. would make him look like a mummy tough xD

The writing is fairly good with uncommon mistakes but sometimes pronouns of different characters get mixed up where you have to read paragraphs again to grasp whats going on. The story development is wonderful and couldnt be better how different stories develop parallel to each other where its not annoying and rewarding in the end. The character design is marvelous and easily one of the best i have ever read. They arent annoying, arrogant pricks, naive saints, almighty gods or comic villains and instead feel realistic in their developement and behaviour. The updating stability could be improved but to be honest i rather have it stay how it is right now instead of the quality diminishing. Last but not least the world development is also done extremely well how you get an idea of the world that keeps your attention and it doesnt get overexplained where it would disrupt the flow of the story or become boring and the "game system" part is something i usually try to avoid in books because in most cases it completely destroys the flow of reading with pages full of stats or it gets used as a cheap way of "character growth" but here it is the exeption and i would say very well done. Overall a great read i can only recommend and i wouldnt be surprised if i saw it listed as a bestseller in a bookstore.