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More chapters is needed for this novel it’s good.

Author great novel the plot and character design is good so far and better than most novels like this. An advice I would give to make it unique would be to allow you’re mc Kaito to active his elf bloodline or better yet his elf lineage make him practically elf in terms of appearance and talent the only bit about him goblin would be his physicality more physical than elf’s would be or most who know him from the infant stage would know he’s goblin and half elf. I say this to make it better and not to always have the mc targeted because of race. What do you think?

I’ve caught up with the novel so far. Days is a good anime show shame they never continued with the anime. However I’m looking for a fan fic novel. Here’s the thing you don’t need to make it like messi or ronaldo mc we readers don’t need it. I would highly suggest starting the novel again as it’s not realistic especially meeting Rob or something. You coulve had like before he dies the mc said combing a days character talent in on person how strong would it be etc. but I would prefer doing a mc who is mizukis younger brother who has talent of mizuki and atsushi kimishita with that his talent would be good. But the mc could be reborn but only comes to fully being awake at close to the end of second year middle school. But here’s the catch the mc has never played football but during that period he could ask mizuki to teach him although difficult but he still plays some games during the final year of 3rd year of middle school and not so much shinning. So in a way he’s at a starting point like tsukushi but he has talent to tap into. Position I would say attacking midfielder but at seiseki he plays on the wing. I can explain more just let me know

I’ve read this novel but I feel like the mc would be better to off being born same year as Harry Potter that’s where everything kicks off and makes sense. Is it possible to do it again from that period?

Why don’t you do another novel based on a reborn younger half brother of vlad and Ingrid in the series. But the only cheat he has will be he’s watched like two seasons of the show and has the template of Vladimir Dracula from the movie and not afraid of sunlight. So he’ll be more powerful than vlad. Him and vlad will be chosen ones in a way.

I won’t lie it just feels forced the who whole novel even adding the mcs brother. I have a suggestion as none really tends to do this but make a another hp with being a twin of Ron unique as he could be magically talented but then don’t try to use advantages like I can build something or invest in stuff to get rich.

What is the point of wishes and even meeting a Rob. Just get straight to the story. You could have just stated before he reborn in his life he clicked a website and choose the only talent natural affinity and family side black then that creates the mc etc.

One thing you messed with wrong was having Harris and Harry for first meeting. Why does every HP fanfic have to follow or meet Harry let the mc do something different go to slytherin make friends there.

I don’t think the readers will think that way.

Keep the novel going.