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please make something that I can read and don't stop Medway like the rest of the story's and please plan where the story will go after that and don't stop in the first few chapter's because that heppan all

please make more chapter's because I love story's like this and make some omakes of otto visiting he's original world to deal with the captain going from a bubble universe to a bubble universe like it was just deriving a car from a place to place and make otto pretty op in the end of the story

hay I have a good idea about a fanfiction way not anyone try to make a story about otto on a multiverse grainy of self discovery and on the way become more powerful and knowledgeable about magic and martial arts and become better cook than mei and meets the honkai impact caste again on later pert of the story and make thet otto can't handle them any more and he starts to say they're dark secrets that they try to hide from ours and make everyone realised that he had every chance to end them from the beginning

I think this otto doesn't realise that he have all the tools he need to win the battle you just try to make the story more complicated for the plot

I like this story but you have to try to make otto lass obsessed with kallen not to the point of the original otto and please don't make the story short try to lengthening the chapter's and make them speak normal it will make it easier for you to right the story and good luck with story and please don't pouch yourself to much okay

more chapter's please

chapter 2

chapter 2

chapter 2 please and it's good story please make more good story's like this

good luck with story