this made my whole fucking day omg

tyty that means so much I've been working on it a lot! Sorry it took so long to get to you.

I really love this book and all of the history aspects in it. The Story Develops very nicely, and nothing felt rushed or slowed down too much.

I really liked it there was just a few things that you could work on a bit more. I really focused on your first two chapters and helping you with those so you can see what mistakes and hopefully apply it to the future. But I loved it and you don't need to review mine but you can if you want!

I think that you should have done a bit more character intro in the start.

When you have some sighing put it before the diologe. "He let out a puff of air." or "He let out a long sigh."

Sorry, I just noticed you said has instead of have.