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sorry but im not, maybe because of the memes

There are a few minor typos, such as "Mijolnir" instead of "Mjolnir" and "their" instead of "them" in the sentence "They had betrayed them, all of their." In some cases, words that should be capitalized are written in lowercase. For instance, "system" and "portals" should be capitalized since they refer to specific entities within the context of the story. There are a few more minor mistakes that can be easily corrected. Overall, the writing is engaging and well-crafted, and these small adjustments will help improve its clarity and coherence.

this is useful I'd say

you mean Resurrector?

Thanks 👍

Tbh I kinda like it, the story flows smooth but the transition is not good, you dont need a line of "-" or "*" to switch to different scene. but overall is pretty good 👍

scary 😨

that was short, but i like it 🥴

idk why but i keep reading Luan as "Juan"

the same thing happened when i go to toilet. while im doing my business, i heard a sound across the room. really scary bro, i fkin sprint to my room