george_okunbor
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I'm not really where ur going with this story
The way u described how he fighting cursed spirit and the taunt the first time was fine but then I did the exact same scene again and the exact same taunt again multiple times u just worded differently I recommend reading murim manhwa or hunter manhwa to give u an idea of good fight scenes
but where are u getting this abilities from ? the void form, the time skip, the dog monster, that ability that shadow has, you created a game that doesn't exist or have a real world reference which is closely related to jujutsu kaisen which means u can just give him any power that can bail out him out of trouble with the excuse that he is game avatar because u haven't explained the game mechanics