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It's funny ) don't you have a built-in translator for automatic language detection? This is Russian.

Bro, I was expecting something like this, because I think you've already described some of this after a chapter before rewriting it. I'll tell you what: you don't have to look for the perfect way out, because nothing will work out perfectly anyway, there will always be at least one discrepancy or a little thing that doesn't match your vision. The further the fanfiction progresses, the more chapters come out, the more mistakes you will see, or, more likely, in the future you will see a better spelling option, this is a fact, you are not the only one. I want to advise you to re-read what is written, your draft, reflect on your style and idea and go with the flow, of course, this is just advice. Dude, if you're one of those people who can be considered pedants or perfectionists, then that's really a problem. Hehe. All that is really important to the reader is, so to speak, a cool, special idea (the basis of the plot), writing style and grammar, as well as inconsistencies or an ideal version of fan fiction - we don't think about it at all. So, one rethink is enough, now you just need to continue, given your writing style, I'll tell you that you'll be popular anyway, I hope you'll listen, good luck.

Yeah dude. you're on the right track, the timeskip is really very appropriately inserted, don't lose this feeling and the further development of the story will go smoothly.

And man, oh. I'm not going to say anything superfluous, just my thoughts on your writing style and manner, you're really cool at writing. Really, no kidding. The grammar, the semantic part, the idea, everything is cool and real. But the only problem is that you're too unstable, you jump from one fanfiction to another, then change your mind again, or even give up at some point for a while, it's really terrible for the reader. Just a little more and I would have gone nuts from waiting..Hehehe. Naturally, dude, you probably see your flaws perfectly well yourself, and I do not know what is happening in your real life, so it is basically impossible to judge, and I do not know what kind of person you are, perhaps this is just your thing, but in any case, just know that people like me who constantly there are really a lot of people waiting for the sequel, I beg you, write more often bro

OK dude, I can try to explain it to you. In short, there really is a small paradox that Seiji really destroyed the timeline by his mere presence. The reason? The reason is that in the future, Seiji will eventually receive the founder's titan anyway, at that time he will have the opportunity to control the timeline of this world, and why did he arrange everything this way? Who knows, maybe in addition to the profit results in the end, there was some other advantage if all the circumstances were put together exactly as shown so far in the plot.

Is Trump in Naruto's world? It sounds like some kind of crap, it's better to continue this work.

Does he have some kind of fetish of constantly being beholden to someone for minor things?

Dude, I know I mentioned that he has an American name in fanfiction, but for some reason Professor X refers to him as Bi Xiao. Do you understand now?

If some idiot is not in the right mindset, then I inform you that the clone, after scattering, transmits to the original only fatigue from training and memories, but not the result of training the body, physically you need to train yourself. Stupidity.

Um, dude, it's actually not surprising that the main character, a Chinese man who was Chinese in his previous life, has the characteristics of a Chinese in fan fiction, it's logical. In fact, I don't see anything wrong with the fact that he has some habits and preferences in food and the culture of his behavior, after all, it is more pleasant and more familiar to him to have something from his native country. The main thing is that the fanfiction should be written without all these Chinese words, proverbs and adverbs from China, because that's what always annoys me in Chinese fanfiction, I hate this crap. What bothers and displeases me the most is the fact that the main character is too open to all these children, sloppy, childish and stupid, he doesn't analyze anything in his environment at all, you can say he doesn't even think at all with his little brain, as if he just does everything as he wants, completely ignoring the prospects and so on. things like that. In short, I'm disgusted with his personality, so I won't continue reading this fanfiction.