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I think it would be better for him to go to Hermione's school than Harry's. There's a high chance of things going wrong when approaching Harry so soon, for sure Dumbledore would know if any pure-blood wizard approached Harry, even if Dumbledore isn't bad in this fic, even Cannon Dumbledore is too controlling to let a pure-blood to get closer to Harry, not to mention that if he didn't tell Harry about magic it would create a rift in their friendship when Harry went to Hogwarts. Better to just put this headache aside and go to Hermione's school.
I like spells that increase his fighting power, so I think adding something like the byakugan (a nerfed version, where he can't see through walls, but only see 360°) or a spell that is like armament haki. would put these spells at peak rank 3 costing something close to 1000000 points. Since the mc is already using lightning on his sword, I think adding a spell that is like the 1st form of lightning breathing thunderclap and flash, I think with a price of around 500000 it's good
I'm liking it so far, everything indicates that the MC is kind but not naive, one of my favorite types of MC in the world of HP. I'm not a writer, but giving my opinion as a reader, try not to make the paragraphs too long, reading becomes less fluid when there are many lines and stories mixed in the same paragraph. As for the harem I would vote for Astoria, or Gabrielle (I don't remember how old Gabrielle Delacour is but you can just adapt it so she's MC's age, and I think Astoria Greengrass is Luna's age) since they are less used as FL and commonly in fanfics have more vibrant and cheerful personalities, but if you are determined to have Daphne or Hermione in the harem I would vote for Hermione.