Hera_Crowley
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Sorry I hadn't posted for a few days I've been sick.
2022-07-11 JoinedGlobal
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Hera_Crowley1mthReplied to Varinderjit_KaurCh 16 Chapter 15- Hera_Crowley1yrReplied to lexie_27Ch 8 Chapter 7
- Hera_Crowley1yrCommentedCh 2 Wanderer
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did you mean to call the goblins different names? They are Gager and Garm in the other paragraph.
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This always happens corded land lines are menace to society
After a second of groping around, he picked it up and brought the phone to his ear quickly. The cord was caught on his desk lamp, and dragged it along with it. Unfortunately, this was the exact moment that the lamp reached the edge of the desk. The lamp slammed him square in the nose and then toppled off of the desk and hit the floor with a crash, the bulb shattering on impact. - Hera_Crowley1yrCommented
take out had before made
Seeing the water had made me realize how thirsty I was. My mouth was dry as a desert. My body moved on impulse, reaching to drink the water even if it was dirty. My body crouched over the water, cupping my hands together to pour some of the water in my mouth. - Hera_Crowley1yrCommented
facts I would be like how dare you!
"...What kind of question is that?" - Hera_Crowley1yrCommented
c'mon
"Oh, cmon, be true to yourself. Look deep. Do you really think you're happy?" - Hera_Crowley1yrCommented
take out and after chairs use a comma instead
A complete stranger of a woman suddenly appeared before me. We sat opposite of each other in wooden chairs and a wooden table between us. We made eye contact, I stared into her black endless eyes. - Hera_Crowley1yrCommented
comma after better
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the second sentence is a bit odd. Maybe say I checked, listening for a heart beat. or just take out and changed listened to listening
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this line is so funny
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You don't need of after countless. countless portals
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check this one too
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Let me know if this is better
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