Destiny_Thought

No, I don't plan on there being yuri.

Hey, thanks for leaving a reader comment! To answer your main concerns, yes, Logan lacks agency in the beginning parts of the novel. That's intentional. After all, someone doesn't go from bullied to a tyrant in a single day. The point is that the reader should feel his frustration. However, in the following chapters, Logan does gain agency, even without being able to use mana, as you've probably noticed by now. If you could reach those chapters, I'm sure that you would feel the shift!

Haha, gotta let my readers be just as disgusted as Logan was

I really really really love the premise, but must you use AI to write everything? I think it's fine to have ChatGPT help proofread and tell you which components should be improved, but the writing isn't going to feel authentic if it's not made by you

Hey! Thanks for your honest review, it means a great deal that you gave me constructive criticism. As to what you said, I understand your concern, and I can see how someone would be frustrated since they can’t peer into my mind and know what will happen isn’t eh future of the story. When I write, I try to put my reader in the main character’s shoes as best as I can. The reason you don’t know much about magic other than the fact you’re gifted it in a becoming-of-age ceremony is because Revian hasn’t yet learned much about how it works, something that Varek actually mentions in one of my chapters. Soon, something in the story will occur that will force Revian to learn more about the world around him, so do know that even if my withholding of information has confused you, it wasn’t meant to last forever. Disconnecting you from the story was a mistake on my part. As to you mentioning how I introduce a number of elements without providing context, could you elaborate a little bit? I think you may be referring to “demigods,” “gods,” and “class points”? I believe I contextualized all the ones I mentioned, although the true importance of class points are going to be revealed in just a couple chapters. The weight of Varek’s decision to save Revian from expulsion will increase the further along the story gets, so don’t worry about me forgetting certain plot devices.

Just wanted to say that you motivated me to continue writing :) it's good to know that people are caught up and actively reading my story

This story has crazy amounts of potential, and I enjoy the way the worldbuilding is trickled slowly to the reader. Certainly a good read, and I recommend this to all :)

The plot thickens [img=proud]

The ending for this chapter was crazy, ngl [img=recommend]

Passive worldbuilding, good [img=nervous]