M_Zero

Yet another crazy person who simply doesn't understand the criticism I wrote. If you think someone brainwashing themselves into believing it's okay to kill criminals or thieves makes them a good person, then they are just a hypocrite with a weak personality. Honestly, anyone who says this novel is good is just as foolish as its author... Go play somewhere else, kid

If you mean that I have zero reading hours on my account, it's because I read from the browser, and reading hours aren't counted unless you use the dedicated app. Anyway, if you weren't referring to me, then I don't know what you're talking about. As for this novel, if you think it's good, it's actually garbage and incredibly bad. If you assume otherwise, it simply means you have no taste in novels and enjoy reading trash. You can see from my profile that I've read nearly 10,000 novels, and let me tell you, this one is considered among the absolute worst of them

I don't think this will happen since there are enough chapters. Honestly, most of those who publish daily are Chinese, as the platforms force them to do so to earn money. In your case, I think it's better to invest your time in writing every day to produce a cohesive chapter with a high word count. Those who read the novel and liked it will add it to their library and receive a notification whenever you publish. If you apply my suggestion, edit the synopsis to include your release schedule. In addition to helping you organize your thoughts and write well, this will also give you a buffer in case you get sick or something similar. At the same time, you won't feel forced to write and publish on a daily basis, because in the long run, feeling obligated will likely cause you to sacrifice quality.

Honestly, your story is good, though it has some shortcomings, but that's not important. The truly important thing you need to fix is the length of the chapters and the word count. The word count in the chapters is very short. Instead of publishing two chapters every day, or one chapter every day, combine them into one long, good chapter, and set a publishing schedule, for example, every Sunday. This will give you time to write and revise what you've written.

Racist, of course not, but the truth must be told: 99% of Chinese novels, whether creative or fanfiction, are garbage written solely for money and have no respect for the tastes of followers or readers. Unfortunately, there are a bunch of idiots on this site who translate them and write fake comments just to make money too.

This novel is a glaring example of lazy writing that insults the reader's intelligence. Despite the misleading high ratings, the work suffers from a complete collapse of its internal world logic, a fundamental contradiction in the protagonist's characterization, and an excessive reliance on cheap, forced plots. Instead of presenting a dark survival story featuring a pragmatic protagonist, the author delivers a deformed monstrosity that combines the bloodthirstiness of vampires with the naivety of shounen heroes. The result is a narrative disaster. 1. Character Inconsistency and the Annoying "Savior Complex" The main character is a vampire hunted by the church, and his primary goal is supposed to be survival. But instead of acting coldly and rationally, the protagonist displays suicidal stupidity and actions completely detached from basic survival instincts. In the burned village scene, rather than eliminating the survivors to cover his tracks and protect himself from the church, he decides to help them in a disgusting, overused cliché. The protagonist here is merely a puppet manipulated by the author to appear morally "righteous" at the expense of common sense. 2. The Provocative Wasting of the Power System The protagonist possesses a terrifying ability perfectly suited for his situation: gaining random skills and increasing his power with every kill and blood drain. In a logical world, he should have used this advantage to "farm" his enemies and evolve into an invincible entity. Instead, he completely ignores this perk! In the dungeon scene, he settles for killing just one person from the mob chasing him and reveals his vampire identity with absolute stupidity, rather than using the blinding skill he already possesses to knock them out silently, or exploiting them as a chance to level up. 3. Forced Plots and Cheap Coincidences The story relies entirely on illogical coincidences to bring the protagonist and his enemies together. The hunted protagonist willingly goes into the heart of enemy territory, courting the "Saintess" by wearing noble clothes and going to the library instead of hiding in his armor. Then, the exact same coincidence repeats in the forest in a lazy recycling of events. The author is incapable of building a natural progression for the story, so he forces the characters to meet to serve a cliché romance plot that completely clashes with the darkness of the world. 4. Illogical Burdens Serving Ridiculous Scenarios Not content with destroying the protagonist's character, the author added meaningless burdens to him just to serve specific clichés: The Horse: The protagonist is a vampire with infinite stamina and speed surpassing a horse, so why bring along a beast of burden that slows him down and leaves tracks for his pursuers to find? The Dog: A cheap plot device shoved into the story for one sole purpose: softening the protagonist's image and creating an excuse to have the Saintess get close to him. This proves the author's bankruptcy when it comes to finding clever ways to drive the events forward. Conclusion: This novel is a genuine insult to fans of dark fantasy and rational protagonists. The author wanted a monstrous protagonist with vampire traits but chickened out of writing a cold, pragmatic character willing to do whatever it takes to survive. Instead, he dressed him in fake idealism and shielded him with "Plot Armor" to cover up his stupid and disastrous decisions. It does not deserve its five-star rating, nor does it deserve the time of any reader looking for logic and intelligence.

General Critique The story's summary was somewhat good, but you ruined it with your choices. Character Traits & Abilities Personality: For example, making him lazy. You could have chosen another trait that is useful yet negative, like being emotionless or something similar. Lie Detection: The ability to detect lies through smell is a clear breach of the Avatar world's lore since he is a waterbender, not an airbender. You could have made him sense lies or emotions through blood, similar to Toph who uses seismic sense, but doing it through blood would be even better. The Blessing: You could modify the name of the blessing to "Blessing of the Moon and Ocean." The ocean aspect would let him sense the presence of water, and this feeling would grow stronger as his level increases. At the max level, for example, he could sense groundwater in the desert or pull massive amounts of water. The "System" vs. Skill Panel The final point is the "System." Simply put, these types of systems in all stories end in one of two ways: either you drop the story like you did, or it fails. My suggestion is to replace the system with just a skill board or a status panel. Skill Progression: He could develop skills faster than others, and when a skill levels up, he gains knowledge along with physical strength or chi. For instance, a waterbender at level 1 can only bend water, but as he levels up, he learns ice bending. Skill Innovation: With each level increase, he gains new skills. To solve the issue of non-existent skills or inventing a new bending style—like steam—it would simply be added to waterbending, giving waterbending several new sub-levels. Physical Combat: For martial arts, he would gain the knowledge of how to apply these arts alongside physical body enhancement so he can actually perform them. It doesn't make sense for him to possess the knowledge to kill someone, only to end up breaking his own body because he can't execute a move at full power, or because it's too complex and requires flexibility. Removing Percentages: Regarding something like a hunting skill: at max level, he would become a master hunter or the best on the planet, but that shouldn't mean he has a 100% success rate. I highly suggest removing percentage-based buffs—like increased strike accuracy or a guaranteed hit—because that ruins the fun of the novel. Character Personality & Plot Progression Proactive Character: Try to make your character better by having him actively participate in conversations, rather than just being a listener or a little sidekick to Sokka. Willingness to Kill: Try to make him capable of killing, not just a clown like Aang. He has transmigrated into a real world. However, don't have him kill everyone; you need some characters alive for the story to continue, like Zuko (I think that's his name). Romance Suggestions Since every Avatar fanfic writer seems to write these stories just for the romance, I advise you to avoid Katara and Azula. You can focus on Toph, since there's no one to compete with for her. Writing & Publishing Advice I hope you finish your story even if it turns out bad, because there isn't a single completed Avatar fanfic out there. Everyone ends up breaking the world in illogical ways and then either drops the work or rushes the ending. I wish you the best of luck. Rewriting: If you like my suggestions, you can rewrite the chapters since there are only 6 of them, which you can do quickly. Chapter Length: Try to make the chapters longer. For example, you could combine the first 3 chapters of your novel into a single chapter. Publishing Schedule: Set a publishing schedule, like every Saturday and Tuesday, or just every Friday. This will give you time to write, review, and correct mistakes. In case you don't finish a chapter on time, you can post a notice explaining that the chapter will be delayed because it needs editing.

You can judge a book from the first few chapters, around twenty if the chapters are short, and fewer if they are long. Don't believe the high ratings on this site; if you see a novel with consistently high ratings, there's a 90% chance it will turn out to be a failure, and the comments are fake or from some silly baboon.

Unfortunately, there are no good novels on this site, and you can't tell if there are any good ones because of the fake reviews that give 5 stars for no reason other than the novel being a harem or the character having a certain ability. It's literally annoying, and what's worse, it deceives you with bad novels.

Yes, it's more of a draft than a novel. The character is strong without any training. In the first chapter, he has Haki, powers, and everything, and by the tenth chapter, he's keeping up with Garp in combat. Honestly, it's like creating ideas using artificial intelligence and putting them on without any training, reason, or knowledge of the character. And what's worse, he gets other powers from Rob. Tell me, do you think you'll be annoyed by this draft, which is in the form of a novel, because of the fake comments? If so, then you're in the same boat as me. Honestly, it's not worth wasting your time. If you don't believe me, you can read it, but I think you'll get angry or bored because of the illogicality. There's no point in having a strong character without knowing how they became strong or what their personality is like without a historical background.