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The writing is innovative, instead of a usual way of describing dialogue, it makes it a hybrid between book and script, which could be a very interesting style. However, with that, it disrupts the flow and progression of a story. After a monologue of dialogue comes the action, then another monologue. But, maybe we'll see how it advances.

The story has a very good premise and an original idea, which makes the entire book intriguing. Though I would say that the characters feel a little bit underdeveloped, but then again, it's four chapters, and all we can do is see.

A compelling novel with a strong opening and well-crafted worldbuilding. The writing shows great promise, but clearer time transitions would enhance the flow and cohesion. With slight refinement, it could reach near perfection.

While this novel offers a fascinating mix of advanced technology and magic, it doesn’t always balance the two seamlessly. The world-building is impressive, but some aspects feel underdeveloped, and the pacing can be inconsistent. That said, if you enjoy fantasy blended with mechs and space-faring sci-fi, it’s still worth checking out. It may not be perfect, but it delivers an entertaining ride.

To put this very simply, if you want slice-of-life, nonsensical shenanigan moments, this book should keep you very entertained most of the time.

The story excels at grabbing your attention and keeping you thoroughly entertained through, with sufficient characters and a plot that does it's job.

Slow pace, but absolutely great pickup. The excitement in this story is reallly enjoyable and keeps you at the edge of your seat.

From what I saw from a different response to another reviewer, you are using a translator in which you forget to use the grammatical mark or something mentioning that. So forgive me for my lack of understanding, but I would still suggest fixing those errors.

Well. . . every book needs the right grammar, doesn't matter what type of book it is. While I could be wrong, from what I see, English isn't your first language (based on the lack of commas in your response), so I would say to maybe use Grammarly. From my experience, it does really well in using correct grammar.

This is just a shameless review from me here. I believe this book is going to be really enjoyable for you. For me, the soon-coming 2nd volume is much better than the first. This first volume is meant to set the scene for the things going forward, so if you wanna join the ride me with me, I'd be eternally grateful.