Legendary_Sparrow

Fair I checked it. I reread it and noticed my mistake lol. So basically every potion has a sequence 1-9 or 0 idk but yeah once you drink a particular potion you’ll have to advance on it and you can’t change to any other one

No I think it means that when you start taking sequence 9 potions you’re gonna have to stick with sequence 9 potions, you can’t go up and vice versa

Oh no I had no problem with the English. On a contrary it was perfectly executed. Was just asking about his standing point like “He stood on a stage” or something. Other than that everything’s good. Keep it up

The synopsis was good and I like the character interactions. I wasn’t sure about it in the beginning but after reading half way I got immersed in it. It got progressively better and the cliffhanger was good

The quotation mark is confusing on this paragraph

The speech was quite impactful but there wasn’t any action before or after the speech. Like was he standing on a podium? What was his standing? He was in a coma for 3 weeks and the event happened 4 weeks ago. Did he recover in a single week? Was there anyone with him while he was giving the speech? It’s a good speech but it’ll have the reader guessing too much

I’ll check the rest then

It has a good and interesting premise, however, the sentence structures need work

Spacing the speech isn’t really a good idea, it makes the structure look odd

The change in tenses is a little issue, but can be fixed easily