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What the hell happened to the writing? Why is it so awful?

Seriously, why does the MC even need a summoning system in the first place? And why is he summoning people just for training? He can literally take whatever Divine Protection he needs and learn the skills himself. Instead of dragging in some random mentor, he could just use Reinhard's powers to give himself the ability to train and improve on his own. Problem solved. These systems are getting so annoying. They're in every fic nowadays, and most of the time they just ruin the story.

I've already wasted enough of my time on this thing, so I honestly can't recommend it to anyone else. If the synopsis caught your attention because you were looking for a story about a Gojo-like character with Six Eyes and a self-developed version of Limitless, you should know in advance that the author eventually throws that entire concept straight out the window. ... Final verdict and warning for future readers: the main selling point of this fic is the Six Eyes and the obvious Gojo-inspired concept. That's what draws people in. Unfortunately, all of that eventually evaporates. The protagonist dies, and some bargain-bin god figure proceeds to take away both the Six Eyes and the technique the MC spent developing, replacing them with an entirely different template. If that original concept is the reason you're interested in this fic, be prepared for it to be discarded and replaced later on.

Hopefully the MC won't be an idiot about this. In Hunter x Hunter, Hatsu is really just the method and direction of how you shape and use your aura. In practice, you can recreate pretty similar abilities using different Hatsu types. Also, don't forget that adjacent Nen categories only suffer about a 20% efficiency loss—you still get around 80% effectiveness with neighboring types. And honestly, with the Six Eyes, the MC should be able to use any Hatsu category with near-perfect control anyway.

Why is Emilia even surprised by his physical abilities? She can practically bounce around like a grasshopper herself, and she's already far stronger than an ordinary human. Even Roswaal can punch straight through a person with a single hit. The knights are even more ridiculous physically since they use mana reinforcement through the Flow Method to enhance their strength, durability, and speed. And that's not even bringing up someone like Reinhard. Even without any Divine Protections, he's basically the Superman of a fantasy world. He can survive an attack that sends him all the way to the moon and then just jump back to Earth through sheer physical power and mana reinforcement alone. He doesn't need his Divine Protections for that. So the MC's abilities really aren't anything uniquely impressive by this world's standards. For the actual top tiers, it's honestly nothing special.

The MC has a girlfriend, yet he reacts like a nervous teenage boy who's never interacted with a woman before just because someone's taking his measurements. Seriously, what's the big deal? In my entire life, every tailor who's taken my measurements has been a woman, not a man, and I've never been embarrassed by it. I don't get why he's making such a fuss over it.

So you're basically copy-pasting the original story while making the MC even more broken than he was in the original fic, if the comments are anything to go by. I vaguely remember reading that one. You even kept the vampire nonsense. Elsa isn't a vampire—she's a Cursed Doll.

There's just one interesting point: it's "Fibbing, fibbing, fibbing!" Elsa was mistakenly assumed to be a vampire. The source of her power is actually a curse — Elsa Granhiert's body is a "Cursed Doll." As long as a cursed being still has mana, they can regenerate. However, if they are pushed completely to their limit, that regeneration will stop working. So the protagonist wouldn't have been able to leave her with a wound like that; her power comes from an entirely different source.

If I were you, I would revise the dialogue between your version of Subaru and Reinhard. In canon, it was Subaru — not Reinhard — who offered friendship first, and that meant a lot to Reinhard. He deeply valued the fact that someone was willing to talk to him normally, without focusing on his status or treating him with excessive reverence. On top of that, because of his past and his trauma, Reinhard didn’t really see himself as someone suited for friendship. That’s why Subaru’s offer in canon genuinely made him happy, and he accepted it quite easily. Here, however, it feels strange that Reinhard is the one who initiates the friendship first. It seems like you’re not taking the canon or the psychological profile of the Sword Saint into account.

What confuses me are these two mutually exclusive points: 1 — the decision to enroll in Godolkin University 2 — the request to obtain American citizenship while simultaneously erasing all data from Vought’s databases so no information leaks out. Don’t you think those things are incompatible? The university is controlled by Vought, and there’s no way the protagonist could stay hidden from people inside Vought if he enrolls there. The moment he ends up at that university, Vought will definitely learn about him and his powers, and sooner or later Homelander would be able to discover him as well. Logically, the protagonist should first make a deal with Edgar for secret training assistance, not enroll in the university. That way everything stays covert, and afterward he could secretly attack and kill Homelander, and only then start planning for the future. Honestly, everyone keeps trying to follow canon, but from the perspective of an actual person trapped inside that universe and possessing powers comparable to Homelander’s, the logical move would simply be to train up, surpass Homelander, and immediately eliminate him afterward. That’s it. Nothing else is necessary. Instead, we get this whole circus of sticking to canon and waiting forever for when the protagonist will finally start acting against Homelander. Though it’s obvious why writers do this — without Homelander, they’d lose both the antagonist and the main goal driving the story forward. They just don’t have enough imagination to carry the plot without him.