Hello Author if you want to look over the sentence in" I got lucky and two times appeared inside the orchard", I think it would sound more natural saying "I got lucky and appeared inside the orchard two times ". But I would also like to say that you have done a really great job so far.

I would like to say that I agree, I have read too many stories with a similar plot, and I think the outcome would be subpar, but of course, I think the author knows how to develop the story.