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The story is very good, keep going ..................................................................................................................................

The name is bad because it is derived from the name Rimuru, and it is also not appropriate for a vampire. I think that names like this are better Dracula or Alucard Mihawk Shanks Sirzix Jasper Lucian Damian

The Body Replacement Technique is not a space technique, but it is a degraded type of summoning technique. In order to summon the wood log, the location of the clinch and the smoke is not a defect. It is to cover your escape routes. It cannot be a space technique, because the space techniques cannot be performed without space convergence.

You must add the feature of tracking and self-destruction for each invention so that the enemy does not get your inventions such as the Navy, the World Government, Shanks and Whitebeard because it will be very bad for the enemy to fight you with your own weapon and also for you to have an advantage

Keep going don't drop it................................................................................................................................

Karin

القصه رائعه جدا من افضل ما قرات فى قطعه واحده وانا احببت شخصيه البطل لاكن فى ملاحظه اريد إضافتها فى مانجا قطعه واحده ظهر ان ايم ساما انثى وليس رجل يجب ان تقوم بتعديلها وسيكون من الجيد ان تكون من الحريم

القصه جيده لاكن فى بعض مشاكل مثل ان لوفى قابل شانكس فى عمر ٨ و كايا لم تمرض غير بعد موت والديها و كان مرض نفسى و كورو اصبح خادم لعائله كايا قبل بدايه القصه ب ٣ سنوات

The story is very good. It does not need to add more dialogues and details. It cares about characters such as his mother’s character, and he needs to interact with the supernatural world by himself more and adds more curiosity.