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Good read, and good story by the author. What i want to point out is the intriguing storyline, the backstory and lore seems interesting and also the worldbuilding. One thing that can be improved is the writing style, specially the exchange of dialogues between the characters. There are also some grammar mistakes, but they're so minimal that they don't affect the overall reading experience. Overall, the story is great and has lot of potential. Will definetely keep this to my list as I wait for more chapters to be published.

nice

nice, keep it going

selena

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nice nice

remove "you" in the sentence

ok... things are getting interesting

not bad

keep up the good work, author!!!

hello! first of all i want to thank the author for sharing this wonderful story to us. been a fun read. so, as i read through the story, here the things i will say: about the writing quality, there are some spelling errors now and then, but it is not enough to affect the overall reading experience. it is also understandable to have those mistakes because you were just a new writer back then, however, i saw the significant improvement as the story progresses, i hope you can continue the pace the story development is good, there are no boring moments and its chapter builds up excitement, that's what im looking for in a story i couldnt say much about the character design and update stability because im only just in the early chapters, so i give them 5 stars. the world background was addressed in chapter 7 onwards, and it was mentioned well overall, the story is good. no boring parts and every chapter gives a sense of excitement for the readers. i hope you keep up the good work author

i noticed the significant improvement of your writing skills in this chapter... the structure became cleaner

insteresting... okay

Yep. Hehe

Hi Kari! I really appreciate your comments and review. They're very helpful to me. Glad that you like the story. I promise that I'll do better so you'll enjoy the story more. [img=recommend]

Overall, the story is good and I will recommend it. I'll also write another review once the story progresses. But here is my preliminary comments: I like that the story starts in the climax right away, giving a sense of excitement, wanting me to read more. Although the story is still in its early parts, I would say that the progression is becoming more interesting. This is just a personal opinion, but I think the author needs to give more dept to her character, although maybe she would address it in the next chapters. The writing style is also good and easy to follow. Minimal grammatical and spelling mistakes.

The story writing is good and easy to follow. I know it's still in the early chapters but the premise is decent and interestinig. For now, I'll leave a 5 star. I'll give another review when the author uploads more chapters.

First of all, I find the art style of the cover so fascinating, it's just refreshing to see that style here in WN. , When I am reading, it feels like I'm reading a traditional novel because of the good usage of words and phrases. Poetic and descriptive. The story is easy to follow and it's very immersive. I also like that the story takes us to action at the very first episode, it really hooked me into reading more. I can't say much about the characters because the story is just fresh, But the design and description are very well-portrayed, especially the MC. World bg is cool too, I understood the setting right away. Even though it only has few chapters, overall the premise is good. Definitely will put it on my reading list.