really good job author i enjoyed reading it and ill continue to read it,amazing job [img=update] magnificant character development, definitely reading all chps for sure
this story has the potential to be great, i'm looking forward to a good plot as i read more into it, good job author [img=recommend], you're doing amazing
great plot, and i like the chractors so far ...good job author
just one thing, a little work on the sentence structure should be great but overall you are off to a great start