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Delgarond8mthCommentedTypo? Metis?
This paragraph has been deleted.- Delgarond8mthCommentedCh 782 A Heavy Loss
- Delgarond8mthCommentedCh 781 Tragedy
- Delgarond8mthCommentedCh 780 Invasion
- Delgarond8mthCommentedCh 778 The Saint Of Spirits
- Delgarond8mthCommentedCh 774 The Cheerful Girl, Lara
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Typo: I think Zeus here is meant to be Poseidon as Zeus is long dead by here
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Typo: being should be begin
"Got it. We will being preparations now. We will take off in two hours' time, so rest for now." Lillia kissed Blake's cheek before running off to put things in motion. This was followed up by the rest of his wives. - Delgarond10mthCommented
Typo/missing word: I would recommend adding “just” in front of today => “it wasn’t just today” And could should be couldn’t
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Typo: second “didn’t” should be removed
"…Y-You are a greedy, greedy man, Victor." - Delgarond11mthCommented
I think you mean Hera not hestia
"Even though I'm completely useless in that place, I still belong to that place." - Delgarond11mthCommented
Typo: made him submit to *her*
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Typo: I think the second victor in this sentence is meant to be something like “they” or “the child”
- Delgarond11mthCommented
Typo: The second woman should be removed.
- Delgarond1yrCommented
Typo : logn should be long
This paragraph has been deleted. - Delgarond1yrReplied to invayne
Thank you for clearing it up.. I was so confused with different spellings.
A loud explosion went off, creating multiple mushroom clouds. While the explosion was powerful, Blake felt like things would not go so easily, even with these modified rockets. His assumption was quickly answered as the flames and clouds of smoke were suddenly dispersed almost instantly. A loud voice bellowed from below. "It's you again! Blake Harris! I will kill you! Rise Andorna!" - Delgarond1yrCommented
Typos: this and the following paragraphs have a typo but I am not sure which is the proper spelling. You have adorna, agorna and adron
A loud explosion went off, creating multiple mushroom clouds. While the explosion was powerful, Blake felt like things would not go so easily, even with these modified rockets. His assumption was quickly answered as the flames and clouds of smoke were suddenly dispersed almost instantly. A loud voice bellowed from below. "It's you again! Blake Harris! I will kill you! Rise Andorna!" - Delgarond1yrCommented
Typo: dragon seems to have a 0 in it
"Lillia, don't get into your drago0n form unless you need to, but for now, we will destroy the magic circle they are trying to activate. It seems to need quite a bit of time before it will activate, so we have to make use fo this window and destroy it." Blake had no idea how long they had, but he knew right now nothing else mattered but destroying the gate. - Delgarond1yrCommented
Typo: give should be get
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