Such a good start! *clap clap* This novel has a promising start, not just the synopsis but the whole chapter is well done. The scenes are descriptive and lean more towards on showing rather than telling. Like the flow of the story. The characters are distinctive and they are already developing their assigned "role" in the story. I like this so far~!

I'm gonna be honest. I'm not usually into this type of genre(?) but this is actually a good read. The chapter is done cleanly and there's no major flaw (not that I notice) in grammar and whatnot. I hope you get more readers and hook those who love this type of stories.

I think you forgot a period here. :)