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I am a picky reader, but I was pulled in by the opening and found myself flying through this book. Like others have said, a few revisions will really make this shine. I can definitely see and feel the imagery that the author is trying to convey. The POV appears to be 3rd person omnicisient, where the narrator explains everything from a god’s eye view. This is a tricky method to get right without committing the son of author intrusion and pulling the reader out of the story, so again, I commend the author for the effort. Keep going! 🙂🙂

Thank you!

First off the author has an expansive vocabulary. These pages are full of medical terms and multi-syllable words. The story is interesting but the scenes are very granular, lots of internal monologue making the pace a bit slow. I am curious how this plays out so I think I’ll add it to my library and stick with it for a while.

Thank you so much for the insightful review and comments!

I was fully engaged during the first chapter, the scene was tense and gritty, but the pace seemed to slow down a bit in the later chapters. I assume we are still early on in the story and that might explains why I’m not sure what direction it’s heading, but overall I love this, and I LOVE the author’s fearless writing style. Nicely done!

Well that took an interesting turn!

This… your story is what I’ve been looking for.

What a way to open up the first scene. So many feelings right now. Wow! I love your style.

You will probably think I’m a noob but I just realized where you placed this comment! I’m still getting used to navigating through webnovel. I did want to say that I really like your writing style, and again, I appreciate your input.

You are absolutely right. I think my goal was to begin this scene in a very dark place and have the reader rooting for the FL when she finally found the strength to fight back. I appreciate your input!