Haha lol I guess it is pretty crap it's my first story and I haven't touched it other than when I have been incredibly bored. But I agree all the characters are out of character and I didn't know now to make a likable character

Thanks but I don't think I am that good and I am sorry I didn't post many chapters just people from real world found my page and harrased me but it so lost motivation but I will try and make some more chapter for you

Hey I don't understand what you are saying, do you believe that the story is moving to quick and I do agree with the betrayal and minggt edit some members out of the harem

Well the writers are adamant on keeping him young

It's Peter Parker and in the comics he has pulled a lot of heroines the only thing stopping him was the writers vendetta against him

He was incredibly angry amd went through a tramutic experience so you can expect him to be static and a bit cringe but as the story progress I hope to show you that Peter will become in your words sigma

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Fixed

I am getting back to it now

Oh did it discount?

That is a bit weird I might change it

What?

Hey do you have any suggestions on how I could fix his behaviour amd make him bit more likeable I see you have a critical opinon