DaoistLORD_PARAGON
I don't know how to write but i am very observant to silly mistakes so imma correct you if i find some and if your story is a disappointment not reaching my expectations I'll definitely abuse you
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DaoistLORD_PARAGON3dPostedYou need to correct those small mistakes you made in the prologue, there's aleast 2 or sum mistakes in the first 4 sentence
detailRebirth: The Villainous Young Master Doesn't Want to Follow the ScriptFantasy · empressblackrose09- DaoistLORD_PARAGON3dReplied to Joshan_Jo
The writing quality is good? WtF bro, are you a bot? instead of correcting the author about his/her writing so that he/she can improve you're lying to the author SMH
detailRebirth: The Villainous Young Master Doesn't Want to Follow the ScriptFantasy · empressblackrose09 - DaoistLORD_PARAGON3dCommentedCh 2 DO YOU ACCEPT?
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Friendship is overrated
How long had it been since he could truly relax? The memories of the bloodshed and schemes in Divine World flooded his mind. Many friends were made, but they, too, abandoned him when he fell from the top. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON7dCommented
truck kun the master in the art of murder/transmigration
He heard some rustling sounds as he crossed the dark road, narrowing his eyes, he looked over and in that instant, his life flashed before his eyes as a massive truck sped towards him. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON7dPosted
He likes to fight too much and sometimes he doesn't think or try to strategies, if you face him with brute force he will face you with brute force but you can also say that this is his charm, what makes him him, the chapter I'm at, he as started realizing his short comings so that's good Pls update more frequently abeg my bro🥺🙏
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON12dCommented
You should go correct this now or else you will keep trying to explain
"Many of you may not have known the arduous journey young Leon Astrahart has completed to appear today!" He said, his voice echoing, "Ten years ago, he was stricken with the uncurable Mana Poisoning disease!" - DaoistLORD_PARAGON14dCommentedCh 8 8. Testing
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON17dCommentedCh 6 First Quest.
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON27dCommentedCh 1 Malivoire Descent.
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON30dCommentedCh 9 Chapter 9: The plan part 2
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It's still too exagegerated... adjust it
After that, he lived his days completely shut off from communicating with anyone, even the terrible nurses who treated him badly and verbally abused him, knowing he couldn't defend himself. It wasn't until one day a lifeline appeared in the form of his professor from the university he had previously attended. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthCommentedCh 1 Advent of Astral Part 1: Creation
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Hmmm a possible omnipotent being making so many mistakes ?
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Your writing skills needs improvement ,you should re write these pages later when you think your writing skill is good enough
they lid of the bin ripped off violently I looked up see my end before me and what I saw made my blood run cold. 5 meters tall, a white chitinous body with tan accents down its front and sides spikes decorated throughout, 4 legs each one ending with a sharp thick spike which could run a man through with ease a vertical torso with 2 scythe like appendages sharp enough clearly to cut through metal with no resistance, A head in a shape similar to a pentagon with small protrusions sticking out of the top in a row, teeth like ivory needles drenched in saliva and eyes black as void staring down into his own.