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The reason I say ai generated is because you forgot to take out the ai instructions at the end of the second chapter. But maybe those were just notes to yourself idk? The other reason I believe this story to be heavily ai influenced is that it was written that Garp and Bogard were “breathing heavily” after their fight fight with the trump pitates. Pirates that Garp could destroy easily with out effort.
I think the grammar is good enough. In my opinion it’s better than your edited chapters but that’s just because I hate how AI editing over dramatizes every sentence.
It does seem better but why are most of the names still wrong. Is it really that hard to control f and replace all the wrong names?
Dude, this is fiction if I say a soul bound weapon is formless and able to create weapons then that’s just how it is.
Your right. I was originally writing in first person and missed this one
Is this guy really living hundreds of years while still being a virgin? I understand if you don’t want to write romance but even just mentioning that he’s been with women would make the story seam more realistic.
It depends I guess. How good is the translation? If it’s trash like most others I’d say start from the beginning.
Yeah this mc is brain dead. He almost dies to a base level human just because he wants to show off.
Yeah, I dropped this as soon as he decided to leave Sebastian Shaw, a SS officer, alive just to keep the timeline intact. Just him being alive so far in the past will already change too much for him to be trying to keep cannon on track Especially with mc’s broken system might as well change whatever you want while gaining as much power as possible.