MrPlatypus
I am Mr.Platypus, and I am not new here, so don't lump me in with the rest of the new amateur readers of this site. Peace out!
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MrPlatypus1yrCommentedUnderstandable, just keep up the current quality of the chapters.
I have tried to have an upload schedule of once a day. But I am having trouble writing over 2000 words in one day and making it entertaining to read. Therefore I am gonna take my time with the chapters while still trying to keep them somewhat consistent.- MrPlatypus1yrCommentedCh 6 Karate Tournament Part (2/2)
- MrPlatypus1yrCommentedCh 5 Karate Tournament (Part 1/2)
- MrPlatypus1yrCommented
I like this one it is really creative and is very diverse.
MS: { Right: Inversion of the senses, what's up is down, what's left is right. what can seem close to you is actually far away. - Left: Inversion of the senses, something small can look giant. a stone can look like an astroid, to the target. } - MrPlatypus1yrCommented
Satoru do be cheering ngl.
"My brother is precise, hit them once, hit them twice, hit them at the bottom, hit them at the top, hit them in the middle, and watch them drop~!" - MrPlatypus1yrCommentedWorst of all, his brother stood up, unlike the sitting crowd, and had cheerleader pom-poms in both hands —doing different motions with his arms. At least he wasn't dressed like one.
- MrPlatypus1yrPosted
Practice grammar or use Grammarly. You should think about your wording as it can get a bit messy. You should also think about not information dumping. Give it to them in smaller portions instead, and it won't feel as overwhelming. You shouldn't take requests from readers as they often times don't know what they want until you give them to them, and it often times ruins either the story or the flow of it. Your way of conversation is making the story very boring. It feels like I'm reading a script. Use quotation marks instead. It is all about practice. Good luck.
- MrPlatypus1yrCommented
Okay, I am sorry I can't anymore. I will take my leave now. Hope you guys continue to enjoy the story in my stead, thank you and goodbye.
[Name: Fujii Uchiha] - MrPlatypus1yrCommented
Is this a penalty system? I don't really like those stories. It is a very easy solution for lack of imagination and you always know he will finish the quest as the MC wouldn't die at the beginning of the story. Well, I hope you don't disappoint me.
[Penalty: Death.] - MrPlatypus1yrPosted
The writing style in this story is far better than the rest of the trash that this site has to offer. I promise whenever I try to read any story from this site, it's as if I'm reading recent puberty hit child's rant, instead of a proper narration style. I'm especially glad that this is one of those rare stories in which the narration style is not completed in just mere dialogues with names preceding them, but properly visualizing the scenario and the emotions of the character. It also focuses a lot on the relations between the characters letting you feel that the MCs are really in the story, which most fan-fic writers forget to do. Keep proceeding with the route you are taking the story and it won't fall short of the rest of the big shot stories. Can't wait to see more from this story. 5/5 platypuses.
- MrPlatypus1yrCommentedCh 4 School Life
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enemies*
He had already confirmed that Aki, Kaseki, and Izuku would show up, as well as their parents. He for a split second felt bad for whoever would have to face Madara in the tournament but shrugged it off. - MrPlatypus1yrCommented"You should start admiring the salads if you don't wanna get fat," Madara stated in all honesty.
- MrPlatypus1yrCommentedCh 3 Advancing Through The Years
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No, don't what is he going to accomplish using Amaterasu? Bruning down the school? Burning villains to death? And Naruto was a reincarnation of Ashura and he couldn't use wood-style like Ashura and Hashirama. So it doesn't work like that I believe. And if so then just say something happened when he reincarnated and it changed. Perfect fix. :)
Ch 3 Advancing Through The Years - MrPlatypus1yrCommented
Don't make it the same as Sasuke, please. I don't think it will work well in the story. Make your own MS ability just keep the eyes pattern and the Susanoo the same. Those who think just because he is a reincarnation of Indra that he should have the same abilities as Sasuke should think about Naruto and Hasirama. Naruto is also a reincarnation of Ashura, and he doesn't have the same abilities as him. Well, it is all speculation. In the game, Madara could reverse time but that wasn't canon. So make your own MS ability. If you are unsure of what abilities you can ask for advice. Me, Mr.Platypus, will be honored to help you.
I have a question. Do you guys want me to remake Madara's Mangekyō Sharingan abilities? It wasn't really explained clearly in the anime. - MrPlatypus1yrCommented
Nice explanations!
Later that same day he and Satoru had been testing out what his new three tomoe Sharingan could do. He was now able to see and feel any type of energy, imitate the opponent's movements to a precise, increase his agility, speed, and accuracy of his attacks even more than before, and was now able to make illusions with his eyes. - MrPlatypus1yrCommented
It to be feeling like this
8 years later… - MrPlatypus1yrCommentedCh 2 Rebirth and Forward