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Viola_Bear

Viola_Bear

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2022-05-01 JoinedGlobal
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    Ch 1 Proud Chef
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    Reincarnation Of Mrs. Chef : Like A Fool
    Urban · Vanila_Michelle
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    she is very lucky

    "Look Miss, if you don't mind I will marry Miss and be the father of the baby you are carrying," said the doctor.
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    ..not continue..
    Urban · Vanila_Michelle
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    poor Ivy

    "Miss Ivy's pregnancy is very vulnerable, she could miscarry if her condition still doesn't improve for the next few days," explained the doctor.
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Replied to Eternal_bunny

    up to you. i don't care

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    Who is the Villain? [Will be republished]
    Fantasy · Eternal_bunny
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    i found too much words oh from chapter 3 to chapter 5

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    Who is the Villain? [Will be republished]
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    too long ummm

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    You should write father using Father not father.

    "Really Fa–"
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    no comma after what for?

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    using dot after before " the punctuation is make confused

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    too much words oh in this chapter

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    it is not need using #### or something like that

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    like it, but you have to improve your writing skill first.

    Ch 1 Chapter-1
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    try to improve your grammar and chinese language

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    I don't understand with your story. Make me really confused

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    what the ...

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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    where is the dialogue tag?

    "My Lady."
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    Who is the Villain? [Will be republished]
    Fantasy · Eternal_bunny
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Posted

    The cover is nice but there are a mistakes at your blurb. Like yieliang or moon, you should write yueliang not yieliang. I suggest you to learn chinese language first before you write your book. but, i like the book eventhough i am not a fan of BL

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    You, Me & Us (BL)
    Fantasy · Eternal_bunny
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    Areumdaum Yeoja

    Lucia bermata bulat berwarna coklat gelap, hidung mancung, warna kulit kuning langsat, dan bibir tipisnya berwarna merah muda seperti bunga mawar. Sedangkan Diana bermata sipit berwarna hitam, hidung mancung, warna kulit agak gelap, namun memiliki bentuk bibir yang hampir sama dengan Lucia.
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Commented

    duh maunya apa sih Dee?

    Sebenarnya hari itu Arya hendak mengumumkan pernikahannya dengan Diana Kartika, tapi tiba-tiba dia mengacaukan acaranya.
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  • Viola_Bear
    Viola_Bear1yr
    Posted

    Wah cerita baru ya kak? Keren nih, kisah mahasiswa yang berlibur di rumah hantu. Jadi penasaran kelanjutannya gimana, bahasanya ringan dan enak dibaca

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    Urban · Vanila_Michelle
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