My_Dixie_Rekt

Change this to Potential

Change this to Type and Ability.

Bro, can you please tone down the Chinese nationalism elements. You don't have to emphasize his currently non existent Chinese identity and his loyalty to China despite not being a Chinese anymore.

As a general rule, just edit out all the future Chinese propaganda stuff. No need for China-numba-one bullshit. Also, leaving behind equipment to upgrade the Chinese industry and stuff is just meaningless and unnecessary in a Hollywood fic.

Also, is this going to be an OC Hollywood novel with OC actors and celebs without any real celebrities??

So much about a dark gritty action movie but we don't even know what the movie even is??

Again man, the way you're writing this doesn't feel natural. There's too much sensationalism going on and it's a bit awkward to read. Also, it's too repetitive. I mean, we get it already that he's a transmigrator with past life experiences and this is not the old Jon, no need to keep repeating it.

Bro, just a small suggestion. You should tone down the sensationalism and just write in a simple and normal manner. That would make the story and the reading experience much better.

Again, you don't have to emphasize that he's eating his meal with indifference! This suddenly feels like a Cold MC chinese novel, where every two seconds, the author emphasizes that the Mc is cold and expressionless.

I'm sorry, but this is just bullshit! Nobody simply understands and accepts that they are a pawn. She doesn't know what type of person he is. The whole point of manipulation is to make her think he's a friend/ally, someone she can trust and depend on. This whole thing is wayyy off!