Doctorsamurai

Why are you updating so slowly and why is the content so choppy?

Did you know that Varys is a black fyre?

I just noticed you changed the chapter, right? Because suddenly John's son, Arin, came from somewhere. And I suggest you go back and rewrite the chapter because it conflicts with what was written in the present.

"I present to you my nation's warrior: Garuda."

The novel is quite well-written, but there is one issue—the pacing is too fast, making everything feel rushed to the point that it's hard to keep up. More details should be added to balance the pacing, allowing for some "filler" to make it more digestible. If it's all "meat" with no "water," it can be difficult to process. That being said, I appreciate the effort to close plot holes, even though some still remain.

I mean the blackfyre, but also the targaryen too. And as for Leana, will you tell me what you did to her? you will tell us on story right ?

Let me ask you, what do you do with the blackfyre? Since Rhaegar is still alive with his family, what do you do with them? Or change their roles to be like the blackfyre family that invades Westeros again during the War of the Five Kings? And what about Daenerys? Will she accidentally find a dragon, find a dragon egg, and Rhaegar sees the strangeness, so Daenerys performs a ritual to hatch the dragon egg and bring it back? Because now your story has a hole. In case you don't know, Rhaegar actually knew about the Long Night as well, before he met Steve. And then he interpreted the prophecy to have 3 dragon babies or 3 children, so he kidnapped Leana Stark so she could give birth to a 3rd child.

Please, please be considerate of the difference in currency. It's not a big deal to you, but it's no different to me, 5 meals a day.

It's up to you. I just suggest something better and try to fill in the gaps, like if Robert marries Leana but the relationship probably won't be good because she doesn't love him and probably only has one child, but if Steve isn't there to take care of her like the first time, she might die because she almost died in the first birth, you can kill her but the heir won't be Jomfrei and have Robert marry Cersei or something like that. This is my suggestion if you want it to not change much.

I think it would be better if Leana Stark puts on makeup with Robert and reveals that she's still alive because if Robert marries Cersei, it'll be even more chaotic. As for her child or Jon Snow, I think it would be better if Steve raises it or at least reveal that Catelyn knows who Jon's child is.