Gustavo_Chura

Thanks for the chapt

Thanks for the chapt

Thanks for the chapt

Author now that I realized, since you are in the Disney world you will include the world of the movie Hercules, after all if you want to get epic and legendary classes you can simply divert the gods of the movie Hercules or even Hades to gain a greater understanding of necromancy

Look, I read up to chapter 7 and after that I stopped. The real concern in this story is that it is very rushed. In less than 5 episodes, his family changes personality out of nowhere after finding out that the MC is rich. The story is a bit confusing at first. I thought it would be based more on real life with artists, singers, etc., but then it goes into the world of fiction. It's a bit strange, but the idea is original. The idea is that in chapter 6, Mandison (the singer) has already fallen into the MC's arms. The script seems a bit forced (it was even a bit embarrassing to read), after all, he only ended up receiving the super soldier serum and the Garp model and the cryptos, nothing that indicated that he was a charming man to fall under his charms in 1 day. And lastly, and not being very sure, a small plot hole about where that 20 points came from when purchasing the driving technique, after all, he didn't do any mission to get it. So based on everything I wrote, I strongly recommend that you re-edit your book.

thanks for the chapt

thanks for the chapt

Thanks for the chapt

Thanks for the chapt

Thanks for the chapt