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Not_Fun_

Not_Fun_

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I want to write something, but I know I won't write something.

2022-04-07 JoinedBrazil
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Replied to SuperAlchemist

    I never once said the novel is trash, did I? I simply pointed out the negatives. Doesn't mean I find it unreadable or unentertaining. Stop being so insecure and try to accept criticism every now and then.

    3.8 seconds.
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    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Replied to SuperAlchemist

    My opinions are very well-intentioned, but fr some reason you clearly don't react well to criticism. I didn't disrespect you, didn't call you names, nothing. I simply said what I thought was dumb. Why exactly do you think my comments aren't well-intentioned?

    The first pass went to Kobe. Seeing Carter closing in, he hesitated for a moment, then promptly passed to the open Pau Gasol. However, it was this momentary hesitation.
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    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Replied to SuperAlchemist

    So I add my opinion to your novel, and because of that I'm a piece of trash? You can't take criticism? Do you expect everyone to like your work without fail? I'm simply pointing out things that I think are wrong and/or unrealistic. Use these critiques as you wish, but calling me names just because I don't agree with what you wrote is just childish.

    The first pass went to Kobe. Seeing Carter closing in, he hesitated for a moment, then promptly passed to the open Pau Gasol. However, it was this momentary hesitation.
    altalt
    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Replied to SuperAlchemist

    Im reviewing the novel, criticizing it. It's my opinion. Why are acting so butthurt when this isn't even a book you've written? It's just a Copy and Paste of some random MTL. And even if you've actually written this, my arguments are still the same: Repetitive, no character development, unrealistic, poor grammar, etc.

    3.8 seconds.
    altalt
    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Posted

    This is NOT an original work. This is a Machine-Translated Chinese Novel. I had my suspicions before, but around chapter 80/90 Weibo, a chinese social media, is mentioned out of nowhere. The quality of the story is already extremely below average. There's no character development, only NBA games consecutively without any focus on the personal life of the main character. The games themselves are full of unrealistic plays, exaggerated "commentary", and constant mentions on how the MC is a center doing 'guard-like' plays. Literally every other paragraph goes like this: "It's impressive that he, a center, can do this." and "Is he really a center?!" and "He is a center but shoots like a guard!!" every f*ing time. Overall a very disappointing experience.

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    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Commented

    So Pau Gasol passed the ball to Kobe, Kobe had enough time to look around and make the decision to pass the ball back, the ball gets deflected, players fall and stabilize themselves before finally getting up and grabbing the ball... and yet there's still 3.8 seconds on the clock when they start running? Hm...

    3.8 seconds.
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    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_3mth
    Commented

    Now this is just unrealistic. No professional player, specially one with the experience Kobe has, would pass the ball here. They would just protect it using their body and waste time. This is just unnecessary Main Character syndrome added to the story.

    The first pass went to Kobe. Seeing Carter closing in, he hesitated for a moment, then promptly passed to the open Pau Gasol. However, it was this momentary hesitation.
    altalt
    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_4mth
    Posted

    Grammar is extremely awkward, characters reactions and actions are extremely over-the-top, dialogue/thoughts are very cringy, and the main character is supposed to be a 27 year old GROWN MAN in the body of a 5 yo kid, but acts and thinks just like a child would. His mother is initially portrayed as this amazing woman that stayed with him when everybody else didn't (in his previous life), but she just comes off as an abusive and aggressive person. First thing she does in the story is to "Furiously yell" at her 5yo son and hit in the face because he committed the horrible crime of forgetting to brush his teeth before breakfast. She then proceeds to keep "Angrily yelling" at her son and husband. It is also mentioned that these beating are very common in their household.His dad... well, honestly the dad is very normal.The MC is a child. Literally and figuratively. He's supposed to be a fully grown man, but has extremely childish actions. He arrived at school and got 'In a trance' after seeing the beautiful young lady at the door, blushing as she smiled at him, forgetting to talk/move (27yo btw). He then proceeds to get lost on his thoughts while his coach is talking, only responding to him when another kids nudges him on the shoulder, which results on him being on the bench. The writing and pace of the story are strange. The writing seems rushed while the starting plot is full of filler, creating this big contrast that just doesn't really work for me.

    altalt
    My system allows me to copy talents
    Sports · Bloom07
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_4mth
    Commented

    Just seems like a horrible mother. He's a 5 year old child. I honestly completely dislike her.

    Turning his head towards her, he complained. But he couldn't finish his sentence upon witnessing his mother's angry face. She was fuming.
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    My system allows me to copy talents
    Sports · Bloom07
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_4mth
    Commented

    So why did they not start with tactic in the first place?

    Gentry took out the tactical board and said, "The Celtics have multiple offensive threats, and with Rondo as their 'brain,' they can choose from various offensive strategies. However, we also have our offensive strengths—Curry and Carlos with precise three-point shooting, Nash's playmaking, Carter's three-pointers, and Frye's outside shooting. With Carlos on the court, completely capable of causing mismatches, I believe our 'Run and Gun' tactics will be more effective now than when Stat was with us."
    altalt
    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_4mth
    Commented

    How? He shot once and got 3 assists. If anything, he has no motivation to score, from their point of view.

    Mark Jackson nodded, then added, "Did you notice, Jon? Carlos has a strong desire to score tonight!"
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    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_4mth
    Replied to EMINENCE

    Basically means the guy is not scared/gets nervous when it matters. I guess saying "Ice in his veins" is another way to explain it.

    On their first night as teammates, Curry can't help but admire Carlos's skill and big heart.
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    Super Basketball System
    Sports · SuperAlchemist
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_5mth
    Commented
    The viewers were already excited. Although some left, with only 420 viewers staying, the others were still here because they liked Breeze's content and the surprise he created every time he streamed.
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    Greatest Streamer System
    Fantasy · ShuviLily
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_10mth
    Commented

    that's actually a simple but effective plan

    If he changed his appearance into that of Li Lin’s fiancĂ© and caused problems for Li Lin’s parents
 then it might be possible that they would change their minds about the engagement.
    altalt
    Life Changing System
    Fantasy · Genrei
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_11mth
    Replied to Vebo
    Going through the Portal
    altalt
    My Wife is the Asura Empress
    Fantasy · thewhitesnow
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_11mth
    Replied to Jazpex

    She wouldn't, but in the movies and the book she did ask that same question.

    "What's the platform again?" Molly asked.
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    HARRY POTTER: ASCENSION BOOK 1
    Book&Literature · Ser_borgur
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_11mth
    Replied to Fire_Boy_5319

    Spare me D:

    He started writing everything he'd experienced today. Isaac had been doing this for the past 3 years, but he never got tired of it.
    altalt
    White Online
    Games · Alekzi
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_1yr
    Commented

    Yeah, I guess this is where I say goodbye and never read it again. Good luck to whomever has enough determination to proceed further.

    I couldn't see Bete's expression; his bangs hid his eyes. But I could feel his grip increasing with every second. My neck made a small crick. I'm sorry, Kami-sama, I think I've become a bit arrogant.
    altalt
    Moved to another book
    Anime & Comics · Elipsyon
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_1yr
    Commented
    đŸ€ŒInsert Fighting GIFs here - Most likes winsđŸ€Œ
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    I'm Spider-Man (MCU)
    Movies · AlienWarlord
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  • Not_Fun_
    Not_Fun_1yr
    Posted

    Last time I read an MTL with a similar plot was one where the transmigrated MC was married to Kushina...... and she NTR'd him with Mikoto dozens of chapters later. He remains oblivious to it as well. I've been fucking traumatized ever since. Just by reading the title and synopsis I can SMELL the odor of a horrible Naruto novel.

    altalt
    The Hokage Married Tsunade
    Anime & Comics · Fire_Cultivation
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