Yeah bro's gonna be caught off guard when Rhaenyra makes her move. It kinda looks like she might rope Alicent in as well with the two pronged attack

So you don't want him to have meaningful relationships. Just act like he's still a kid who thinks sleeping with a ton of people is cool. He's had a couple of flings already. If this one doesn't last, so be it. Ricky has more self control. Maybe he has a couple dalliances between relationships, but it seems he has substance. He actually wants to put his time and effort into one person. Even if it is only for a time

This is stolen work from Fahad09 on ff.net Here is the original link https://m.fanfiction.net/s/10710606/1/A-Demon-Lord-s-Hero?__cf_chl_tk=kUpiSfi5TnNqWSOTOMrvewVVdkq3p8RczsE.jTRqoYE-1708381380-0.0-4626

This is Stolen Work from Fahad09 on FF.net Here is the original link https://m.fanfiction.net/s/10710606/1/A-Demon-Lord-s-Hero?__cf_chl_tk=kUpiSfi5TnNqWSOTOMrvewVVdkq3p8RczsE.jTRqoYE-1708381380-0.0-4626

Disjointed Thoughts, not coherent Tl/Dr: It's pretty good, if you overlook some things I would like to say I couldn't care less if this was monogamous or multi as long as long as it's a good read. It's the latter this time I read over 200 chapters. It started out great. New dude becomes Hachiman, and he gets an improvement system. Which isn't bad, but a lot of authors aren't great with a possible op character in a slice of life world. With some always putting it in your face how great mc is, glazing dude to the max. Which the author isn't really bad with. Anyway let's get to it. He explains away how good he gets in certain activities, as having just had an epiphany, or I just got better right now(like right at that exact moment). Kendo/sports is understandable sometimes you enter the flow state and things click. But cooking, that actually takes time, even if you're exceptionally talented. I guess you can explain it away by anime logic. I can understand the sentiment of being the best at everything if you can. It just seems to feed the ego at that point. Like Satoru Gojo said he could be great at everything, but it would get boring after a while. He decides what some people who get isekai'd do, to accumulate waifus. Mc comes off as creepy when arranging a meeting with Yui, dense majority of the time. He likes to wave things off as he claims he is a "gentleman ". The slow burn romance was actually okay at first. Then he puts off the first girls and starts catching them like pokemon. Bending over backwards for original mc love interest Yukino. Not to mention the regression of character growth for a lot of characters like Yui, Yumiko, and Hina. Just to fall back to original plot to get Yukino instead of being proactive. Then just kissing girls without concern or situational application(shizuka), and them just falling in love. Like one reviewer said do the heroines justice if you're going to put them in that type of relationship instead of someone that will just agree and go along with no opinion or push back actually treat them like the person they are The dialogue is super formal considering they are teenagers, I figured it would have been more casual If you read the review this far you are a trooper

Sorry for the delay. I couldn't find 45, 49-52. Then again I may not be able to navigate patreon correctly

Don't mean to bother you, but not all of the chapters to Fate: False Sovereignty are public. Do I need to make an account to read the rest?

Great story, needs a beta though. A lot of run-on sentences. Some of them seem to be on purpose to inflate word count possibly. I could be wrong, if so apologies. Sometimes their is a case of over explaining. Ch 8, when Rhaenyra, Aemma, and Saera are talking about Daella and their childhoods Minor nitpick on my behalf. But saying kids, mom, and dad breaks my suspension of disbelief. Instead of mother, father and children/child. The first read I enjoyed it enough to gloss over it, which tends to happen. The second read I couldn't help but notice. Other than that great story

Yeah, you forced Mei liking Jiraiya. Also the brother/sister thing was forced. The story you had going for yourself is starting to unravel with unnecessary drama. If Mei started liking Aokiji he could've just rejected her. Men never put theirselves in a brother position unless they are actually family, it's just facts. What seems to be the case is you are trying to keep Jiraiya alive. Ain't no way that Ichiro, and Mei being stronger than him are losing. This is my guess as to what happens next. Mei leaves the Mist to be with Jiraiya, or something along those lines

Katara isn't beholden to Aang. Realistically they would have never got together. What 14 year old girl would be with a 12 year old boy no matter how powerful. That was just the creators having a wish fulfillment. If you want to go by canon, you can use the fact that the old woman said she would be with a powerful bender. Zan is both older and more powerful than Aang. But it's up to the Author