i really like the small devolpment about the relationship with his uncle eager to see the next chapter

i like how you are marking the emotions i personally prefer when someone mark the emotions or at least try to do that really surprised in a good way

starting to feel "trapped" in the story good

really like this chapter you were not repepetitive anymore i like it good chapter

ok i like it i am starting to see a little charchter develpoment but you need to add a little more character physical characteristics the background still fantastic you have a talent for that

i really like this first chapter sometimes though is a little ripetitive and the characters are hard to imagine but i like how you are describing the atmosphere and background are actually pretty good. keep it up

grazie mille nonostante sia passato un po' di tempo sono finalmente riuscito a riprendere il prossimo capitolo dovrebbe uscire fra poco