Needs work. Punctuation and capitalization are both lacking. It is obvious to even the untrained eye that no proofreading was attempted. None of the information is substantiated with anything other than personal claims, making the information presented unreliable. The author calls other publicly available information incorrect while providing no supporting evidence to their claims. Both sections about TikTok blatantly reflect the author's own personal biases on the subject. None of the claims provide any evidence. Most claims are backed by the author's own experience or are not backed at all. To consider this as anything other than a joke would be utterly preposterous.

Needs capitalization and punctuation.

Needs a period.