Health took a downward turn and I had to get a new job to pay for medical bills, among other things T_T I am not like dead, but I am still recovering from stuff. My health is never GOOD but it's often not bad. That is... currently not the case haha.

Gonna be off for a few days. I'll be posting more content either right before the end of the month or right after. Bye bye for now!

I have edited it. I'm not sure if it's an improvement, but I took a shot in the dark at cutting down the repetitive stuff. I... THINK it worked? Maybe?

Is that correct? I might just rewrite it to be "Undead creature" instead.

Going through and fixing these. Appreciate you!

You know what? I... also didn't know this was based on a real thing.

The whole point of the training and of him receiving some perks, such as an enhanced physique early on, was to allow him to gain the power to endure the supernatural. It was also explicitly stated, chapters ago, that his first kill would allow him to endure more supernatural qualities and manifest supernatural attributes externally. He ceased to be a mundane being the moment that Ghriza gave him his glimpse into the intended future.

Infelizmente, não falo português. Posso compreendê-lo um pouco, pois sou um falante nativo de espanhol, mas não posso responder sem a ajuda de um tradutor.

Very true... Yeah, raw numbers probably don't work very well for this kind of thing. Especially since it's about being powerful and numbers, with no context, probably aren't helpful there.

I created this as an attempt to get more people interested in jumpchains. Please let me know what you think I missed, if anything, in this fairly long explainer document for jumpchains. I hope I got all of the key points here, and I believe I did.

That's fair. I suppose I conflate villain mc with dark, which definitely isn't always true.

As you and I have been in conversation for a bit, I would be curious what you think of the review I just wrote for the story. You are one of the few people who has articulated questions about the ins and outs of the ways that perks and alt-forms work (though you are not the ONLY person, just the one who has questioned it the most). I think my review is... accurate. I feel like a lot of readers might think it was too harsh, but as the author, I feel that it most reflects my thoughts on the story. I'd love to hear your opinion on it!

Hey there friends! Look at this, an author giving a... SOMEWHAT unbiased review? How cool. Anyways, generalized but non-specific spoilers are below. Long review ahead, but it might be worth reading, before you try to sit through the story. This is my story. I like it and will talk about what I like with it, but before I do I want to want about some of the negatives of this story. Or at least let you know what some people, rightfully, criticize. The main character is very, very powerful. I like writing about what amounts to powerful toddlers. I have a specific meaning for that admittedly odd phrase. My favorite kinds of characters are very powerful beings who don't know how to properly utilize their power. The MC is that kind of being. Or rather he becomes one, fairly fast. Not everyone is cool with that, and that is super valid, I just don't want you to read this story if that kind of protagonist annoys you. The main character is also fairly dark. He's not a SUPER edgy lad or anything, but he hails from... arguably the worst part of a dystopia and it seems that I as an author do not really communicate that well because readers are always commenting on how odd it is that the MC is a dark dude who doesn't always seem dark. His birthplace is District 1, a career district, in the Dystopian Young Adult series The Hunger Games. He wants to be in the Games because his district rose him to want to be in the Games. He wants to win. He is cool with murder and stuff. If dark, villain MCs aren't for you, this is definitely not the story for you. Some topics, and thoughts in this story are dark. If that's not for you, that's super cool, but like maybe consider if you want to read a story that is open about those things. I do not want you thinking the MC is a good person. He isn't. As for the stuff I like about the story... The MC is a calm person, mostly, who actively loves his powers, and the settings he will go to, and isn't into random, purposeless murder or other acts of edginess. I like dark stories, this is (or rather will be) a dark story, but I also have a deep love for the settings I write about, and for jump-chaining in general. I think that probably bleeds through and is visible to my readers? Probably? I hope so. The first arc is something I enjoy, though I admit it has flaws. It is not supposed to be super difficult or anything and it IS meant to give the MC a LOT of power. It does. If that annoys you... This genuinely might not be the story for you, and that is super cool. I think my writing is only half good, at best, but I still love writing, and I still intend to continue doing it and to try and improve. I feel like, for the MOST part, I do a decent job of mixing progression and ability stuff, and I strive to slowly do better over time. That said, the beginning is a bit ability heavy. Which, to me anyway, is fine. If it's not for you, sorry. But that aside, I try my best to listen to and incorporate feedback, suggestions, and more, in ways that make sense. You can ask my readers, it's clear that I listen to and respect the feedback I get. I try to incorporate it, meaningfully, into the story. Even if someone doesn't like parts of the story, it seems like reading the story, past the first... I'll say 7 or so chapters isn't super boring. There are other, valid criticisms of it (which is why I, the literal author here, mark the Writing Quality, Story Development, and Character Design three out of five stars), but I am working to improve my writing. I don't want this work to take itself too seriously, but I want it to be enjoyable, and to inspire readers. I want readers who read this story to have a good time, and while I can't please EVERYONE I can try my hardest to write something I am proud of. If you want to read what amounts to a fun power fantasy romp through a lot of settings (which, in my opinion anyway, is what just about ALL jumpchain fiction amounts too at the end of the day) featuring a dark MC who isn't into needless, RANDOM violence... Maybe consider giving this a read? You might like it.

As one final comment here, I am certainly going to go back and edit in a section into this chapter that explains the alt-forms. Somehow. It'll probably be a Ghriza section, so this doesn't blindside people. This was JUST lazy writing on my part. I can correct it. It'll probably happen in a few days. I'll probably comment on this again when it's done.

It's the Hunger Games. Everyone is obsessed with offing everyone. Plus Katniss is public enemy number #1, even in the canon of the movie, for her romance with Peeta, and for her 11 on the training scores.

FIre vampire is actually an alt-form from another thing. I didn't want to narrate EVERYTHING which might have been a mistake on my part. Hmm... But Ether Zombie is a zombie alt form from a setting known as Lords of the Night, and fire vampire is another alt form from a separate jump, based on the same setting.

It's not but it is still a... super not fun, potentially very dangerous setting.

Gonna be coming back to this story in a few days. I like to focus on one story at a time, and am currently working on my other story, but I'm missing Andrew. If you're missing him too, we'll be back soon!

As this is a web novel and thus can be edited, I'll probably go back and edit some of the earlier descriptions of some of the weirder perks and stuff when I do my first serious round of edits. I don't want to be overly-hand-holdy, but you are definitely right that some perks, or at least their application in the story, need and deserve more time in the editing room.